Re: A DANCE OF NO TUNE by stevopoet	Dovina 70.38.78.229	19-Oct-06/11:43 AM
"Heaping up dance on my hips" - good line. But starting every line with an "ing" word is a bit boring. "Shaking ones head" takes the "me" out of it. Is English your second language? If so, not bad.
Re: a comment on Your Eyes by Dovina	Dovina 70.38.78.229	19-Oct-06/11:35 AM
I was experimenting with a title that’s totally unrelated to the poem, at least on the surface. Glad you like it.
Re: a comment on Your Eyes by Dovina	Dovina 70.38.78.229	19-Oct-06/11:34 AM
I find it a strange thing that my work is not all considered good or that none of it is considered good. Yet it’s true as you say. I have some unusual views, I guess, and they don’t always come through well. Thanks for your comment.
Re: a comment on Crappy by drnick	Dovina 70.38.78.229	19-Oct-06/11:26 AM
You believe that the universe is eternal. You have no proof, but it seems to you most likely, and that has given rise to your faith that it is true. Though you did not mention it, you probably also believe that intelligent life developed naturally from processes inherent in the universe. To not believe these things is to consider the possibility of God. I do not hold a belief in the eternalness of the universe. I can accept it as having started at some point in time or as having been placed in eternity by God. In either case, it is God, operating on a level beyond my comprehension, in whom I believe. I don’t know much about God, but I have more freedom to think about the universe and consciousness, and about my part in all this, by accepting God’s existence, than I do by rejecting Him. That is why I said that my faith is less than yours. The only ones without faith are agnostics. I used to be one. You’ll see from my early comments on poemranker that I’m on a journey. To where, I don’t know.
Re: 11th September (a senyru) by scitz	daniella 200.127.64.189	19-Oct-06/4:11 AM
9/11 was an inside job. connect all the mind boggling dots at: www.loosechange911.com/index_main.html wake up america
Re: a comment on SMS by daniella	daniella 200.127.64.189	19-Oct-06/3:59 AM
:) i never got that call
Re: a comment on Gracy (An ode to my greyhound) by mindsigns	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:10 PM
Much better!
Re: Pump the Guns by oddgreenout	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:09 PM
tripe
Re: snot by fattony	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:08 PM
This showed considerable promise until that 4th line. I suggest the last line should read: "in the matted nose hairs i clipped so short" And you spell nostril with an "i", dearie.
Re: Young Dead Flesh by Harry Hunt	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:05 PM
Quite amusing But confusing
Re: Let's Grovel For Jesus And Fight The Naughty Satan! by Sing4Jesus!	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:03 PM
Howlingly funny! I love this!
Re: Let's Do a Test by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:01 PM
not so gooding? You must have been desperate for a rhyme, dearie. 0/10 again.
Re: Waiting for the Doctor by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:01 PM
Brilliant rhyme scheme. 0/10 and count yourself lucky I'm feeling generous.
Re: Fifty if Nifty by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:00 PM
This will make 'em roll in the aisles down at your local tabernacle.
Re: a comment on PURPLE COWS by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/12:59 PM
You certainly need an enema. You're dead right there, dear.
Re: PURPLE COWS by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/12:58 PM
About as funny as the last outbreak of the Black Death.
Re: One Nation Under God by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/12:57 PM
This is truly, sickeningly, repellently awful. One nation under God? Are you crazy? America is a racial mish-mash, a mixture of demented bible-thumping creationist Christians, aggressive psychopathic ill-educated redneck patriots and sentimental sloppy hypocrites. And those are the better Americans!
Re: a comment on People vs Corps. by Jack Diamond	Jack Diamond 71.103.83.39	18-Oct-06/10:17 AM
I guess I'm not "one" for technicalities as long as my opinions are clear. I realize now that I approached this poem in a colloquial manner as though I was speaking to a friend about my view of a corporate drone - (person who works for corperations that profit off the low income individual).As for possessiveness: I think I would be more possessive if I didn't share my opinion, and I sure do wish not to own this opinion all to myself. I have talked with people who feel the same way. As for compound: I would have to say there is no mixed feelings, or two or more seperate things combined together, such as humor and appalling insensitivity. I'm just telling it how I see it. Thanks for giving mind to my poem...JD
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	half.italian 70.36.242.152	18-Oct-06/2:45 AM
Great poem. It flows incredibly well for me until the last line. At first read I thought the reference to self bothered me, but now I'm not so sure. It just doesn't seem to fit with the rest. Honestly, I don't understand (as other posters mention) how your work varies in quality so much. Farewell Kind Lover was another diamond, but most of the stuff in between I haven't liked very much. Anyway, this is great.
Re: a comment on Work by half.italian	half.italian 70.36.242.152	17-Oct-06/11:47 PM
Requiem for a dream made my skin crawl. I litteraly felt like I was on speed by the end. It was genius, but not something I'd choose to subject myself to often.