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A DANCE OF NO TUNE (Free verse) by stevopoet A DANCE OF NO TUNE
Twisting up my body emboldened
Hyping my spirit to Planet 9
Thrusting gently my soul to an off beat
Jerking up my feet in no fete
Throwing hands in the air
Moving my carcass to an unheard hurly-burly
Heaping up dance on my hips
Humming to a tune of no name
Shaking ones head like an Agama.
Until my Fibula was aching
I became hyper-active
For what, I queried myself?
For a dance of no tune
Indeed a Fandango only of the Spaniard.
Alayande Stephen T.
12.25am
1st October 2006
This time in Samonda, Ibadan.
In my quest to situate the 46 years
Independence Anniversary of Nigeria.
We are dancing to no tune in particular.
Up the ladder:
WITH GOD , NOT THEM (11)
Down the ladder:
The First One
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Posted: October 18, 2006 3:50 PM PDT; Last modified: October 18, 2006 3:50 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.905148 Overall Rank: 9729 Comments:
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Dovina @ 70.38.78.229
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19-Oct-06/11:43 AM
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"Heaping up dance on my hips" - good line. But starting every line with an "ing" word is a bit boring. "Shaking ones head" takes the "me" out of it. Is English your second language? If so, not bad.
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