Re: Three Worlds by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	14-Nov-06/9:07 AM
Christ's chin if that is a portent to the current state of your ewok we are all doomed.
Re: Three Worlds by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	14-Nov-06/5:43 AM
'Weasel doing in the goose'? That's too much Brixton at 3am for me. Either that, or it means something which I dread to imagine. Stanza 4 is really good. I'm surprised that you didn't include the recurring images (river/brook, weasel/goose, sun) in stanza 2 though. Line 9 misses the rhythm - could do with fixing. The rhymes work well though.
Re: Three Worlds by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 61.17.227.34	13-Nov-06/6:43 PM
D... It's surprising how you rhyme your lines. It's so unusual of you. Apart from that, its sad to see that PR is heart broken.
Re: a comment on May Sinners Rot In Fucking Hell! by Sing4Jesus!	Engelbert Humpalot 194.154.22.52	13-Nov-06/9:58 AM
I only wish I could vote twice for this one!
Re: Edna's Lovely World Cup Poem by Edna Sweetlove	Engelbert Humpalot 194.154.22.52	13-Nov-06/9:56 AM
This gives me mixed feelings; football is working class trash, so if I praise the poem, am I praising football?
Re: In a Church by Sasha	Engelbert Humpalot 194.154.22.52	13-Nov-06/9:53 AM
Religious bollox.
Re: To My Love by Lola	pollywolly 80.192.5.87	12-Nov-06/12:20 PM
i like this short piece. has the lines "no promises, no demands" which are also lyrics from a song on the topic of love with no promises, nice
Re: My heart belongs to you by creepshow	pollywolly 80.192.5.87	12-Nov-06/12:13 PM
the real tragedy you write of here is the pain love causes. how can something which is so wonderful to have cause so much pain. i guess poetry is a good way to find that answer
Re: a comment on I always Win by InWonderLand	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/4:31 PM
It's what a wasp does, isn't it? A waspish-looking poem, too, a kind of in-your-face reversal. It's what is. Butt "is" is such a bland word. It's what bees - much better.
Re: a comment on I always Win by InWonderLand	InWonderLand 71.92.211.90	11-Nov-06/3:14 PM
Dont have a stick up ur ass about it!
Re: Mind of One by justjay	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/1:52 PM
This has potential, but think about "Spinning around in circles that no one has ever imagined." What does it really mean? is it true? Does it really add anything to your theme? Also consider the grammar throughout; is it better to follow the rules?
Re: In a Church by Sasha	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/1:47 PM
It's a good poem, I suppose, at least a good poem in translation. Couldn't you improve the meter though, and not lose the meaning. i.e.: Star candles in the people’s hands, a bit of tallow for Madonna. Each a gift, a silent prayer, a secret keeping holy honor.
Re: POT OF THE POET by stevopoet	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/1:31 PM
It's a lot of words about poetry strung together withour much of a point. I suppose it's clever, but not very.
Re: forgotten by the indign	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/1:21 PM
Cut out half the words for starters. Then see if there's some intresting way to way it.
Re: I always Win by InWonderLand	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/12:50 PM
Do you think switching upper and lower case is cute? It's not. This needs more thought about what it says.
Re: Accusation by INTRANSIT	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/12:44 PM
Yes, poor poor man. He has no choice, always accused for what he is. Cut him up, girls; each take a piece. Really, this says it quite well.
Re: Dovina & Co by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 72.234.150.12	11-Nov-06/12:25 PM
If a Company can have a heart, then its eyes can have despair, and you can look there and say, "It will survive." Some eyes have faith, others hope, others love. And you know which is greatest.
Re: a comment on Dovina & Co by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 62.252.32.15	10-Nov-06/3:31 AM
Not so bad, thanks. It's essay time again which means that theoretically I'm in every night working hard (hahaha). I'm going to have to decide what to do next year pretty soon though...
Re: a comment on Dovina & Co by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 61.17.22.171	9-Nov-06/7:05 PM
Go ahead SR, empty all that dirt from inside you. Hope you feel better after that.
Re: a comment on Dovina & Co by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 61.17.22.171	9-Nov-06/7:04 PM
The holiday was a good break and a great month. Family reunion after three years is a big blessing. Had a whale of a time, thank you. And, how are you?