Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	9-Feb-07/7:27 AM
That's not entirely fair; I gave a six yesterday but the poeme got resubmitted and the vote was lost in the bow'ls of deletion.
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	9-Feb-07/7:26 AM
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Re: a comment on Cupid Missed Two Junkies (slightly clearer, rambling draft) by Ranger	Ranger 81.103.124.179	9-Feb-07/7:25 AM
Thanks, Supreme - I did intend to return to this a while back but never got round to it. Maybe I will in the coming weeks, especially with the suggestions (yours and others') which are certainly clearer than this poem is in its current format ;-) It's not even worth a seven as of yet but we shall see what an edit can do for it. Thanks once again :-)
Re: broken bottles by richa	donmiguel1960 70.198.64.237	9-Feb-07/4:46 AM
I like it
Re: a comment on a days journey by donmiguel1960	donmiguel1960 70.198.64.237	9-Feb-07/4:40 AM
that morning, i was deeply and emotionaly week. some days its hard to function, or even move. getting up to eat can be a task only to hope for. its an emotional struggle i live with. the word should be weak
Re: Out alone in the winter rain by Prince of Void	Dental Panic 84.27.81.27	9-Feb-07/3:23 AM
Saw a film about John Callahan, the cartoonist. He writes beautiful songs too - he's also a very good cure for the inflatable kind of self-pity you're exposing here.
Re: Stopped Cold by coldiron	Dental Panic 84.27.81.27	9-Feb-07/3:11 AM
This is very good. Reminded me of the time I was in Chios, made a trip to sit on Homer’s stone. Great view there (closed my eyes, tried to hear some sirens singing - only nagging kids, a mother yelling. The sea).
Re: Guide Me by x311	Tman 161.184.192.141	8-Feb-07/7:57 PM
an honest effort.a little one demensional
Re: a comment on A Cautionary Tale by Tman	Tman 161.184.192.141	8-Feb-07/7:48 PM
spelling mistake.should say ether
Re: Out alone in the winter rain by Prince of Void	Dovina 75.82.86.162	8-Feb-07/7:26 PM
Just a minor suggested revision: Out alone in the winter rain Happiness is high there, sky is up I remember those tears of joy had hidden Behind drops of rain I’m still singing in the rain And all memories flow upward Inside consuming bliss. Cheers
Re: A Cautionary Tale by Tman	Dovina 75.82.86.162	8-Feb-07/7:23 PM
What is the "either of sleep"?
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	8-Feb-07/7:13 PM
Oh, they're lovely. Thank you, ALChemy. :)
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	8-Feb-07/7:12 PM
Maybe not better, but more Rangeresque.
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	8-Feb-07/7:09 PM
It's because you got the maxim slightly twisted. Try: "It's better to give than to receive." I bet she liked the flowers.
Re: Cupid Missed Two Junkies (slightly clearer, rambling draft) by Ranger	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104	8-Feb-07/3:54 PM
This needs a bit of consideration, and more defined shaping of the scene. While the title presupposes the theme, it as it stands now is a little confusing to me; basically, I'm wondering if you have a pretty good image & mental snapshot of the of this man, posed in that odd bodily articulation assumed just before & during the coveted arrival of deathly-bliss; the opiate rushing of the soul towards oblivion... Or if he just discovered that it was laced with acid and had a sporadic thought, or image, of enhancing the coming madness with the consumtion of an bloody orange. In short, I'd be happy to see this piece recieve some sharper definition. The image and thought this poem grasps for is worth perfecting. Till then, mate, heres a seven.
Re: She dreams by amanda_dcosta	Dr Peter Douglas 80.225.168.241	8-Feb-07/2:55 PM
a beautiful dreamy love poem amanda, full of sunshine and love and blue skies and rainbow colours of joy and love. Excellent.
Re: Bitter by Ranger	Dr Peter Douglas 80.225.168.241	8-Feb-07/2:52 PM
A very sad and deep poem Ranger. Ghosts have a habit of haunting you for years and then suddenly fading away back to eternity just when you need them most. Here in the Jungle the tribes pay homage to their ghosts all the time and have places to honour them. Some people may say thats weird but its strangely compelling and helps them and me to talk to people who have gone.
Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Dr Peter Douglas 80.225.168.241	8-Feb-07/2:45 PM
Wow Dark so many and excellent! A meagre ten does not do justice but i offer it anyway.
Re: A Part of Me by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.225.32	8-Feb-07/1:07 PM
Ranger, you are probably right but the whole Cartesian mind-set seems to be fair game though rather abstract which makes for a difficult subject to write about. Thanks for the read and comments.
Re: a comment on Flowers by Dovina	Stephen Robins 89.243.78.56	8-Feb-07/11:46 AM
Ranger your average vote is 7.94 - you really are too cheerful. There once was young chap named ranger, Who'd place his poor life in grave danger, He wandered 'round town, With a smile, not a frown, And hug and kiss a complete stranger. That is easily the softest most gay poem I have ever written, clearly you are infectious.