Prince of Void
on A Letter to You by QuirkyWonder
8 Aug 2004, 12:42 AM
The nice poem ...i like it
thank u for ur comment ...the silence is ur answer..u know sometime people think they know a lot about their worlds where they live in ...but sth always goes wrong ...i know i am not the best ...i wont be best i just try to complete my own verses in any condition ..maybe finaly i will say goodbye to the fancy place ...called world...whatever i lost in the world where this world and other sides lost ...u dont know me ..so u cant reach the sense i created in . .well do u think we care? many things ars still undiscovered ...we are just discovering ...........
"...until I make what they say is the right choice.
"I will extenuate the enemies... "
Your 'level of ignorance' is olympic.
Hauntingly awful.
yea i know it could be. its the first one i've ever really written. I'm from central NY, not too far north of syracuse. why?
could be a bit better considering it's a lyric, where in ny are you from anyway? (8)
sth made me think about this poem ..welldone
the nice poem ..i felt what u were going to say
Wow that last stanza is really cool. I like how you approached the whole mother earth thing with lines like "A mother whose gravity keeps all children near"
Why the semicolon standing guard off to the right?
The second verse is very nice. It's all good.
A brief epoch and a little didactic. Good
"who's" "weathered face"
That being the case, I delete my comment due to lack of understanding your poem on my part.
Wow .. I give it a 10 ^__^
"and god goes not at all with wine" ace.
and that's when Tina screamed "IKE!"
Soggier than an overly turgid hump-loaf.
i cant wait to see the finished product. its like something i'd tell my kids..if i had any..
until you get your heart broken and say "what was i THINKING!???!" sorry..hope it works out
ooooookkiiie doookie
sorry that was somewhat confusing is there a way to edit comments?