Re: a comment on Consider the Grass by Dovina	Dovina 204.251.247.214	4-Jul-07/3:24 PM
In western Kansas they’re harvesting a bumper crop of wheat; and the price of wheat is double normal. I see a lot of sunburned smiles in Tribune. Their fortune follows good weather in the west and crop failures in the soggy east, driving up the price. I have no stake in this except to watch the combines, the trucks and the grain elevators rising like temples above each tiny town in the Plain.
Re: a comment on Consider the Grass by Dovina	Dovina 204.251.247.214	4-Jul-07/3:23 PM
Agreed on “resilient” and “lesson.” Most folks say I’m too thin; you’ve caught me fat. I’ve also taken some of the awe out. Rankers get tired of too many edits, so I’ll not post the changes. Thanks.
Re: Farewell by Skamper	INTRANSIT 65.29.60.146	4-Jul-07/7:23 AM
For some reason, I want one more couplet. I'm gonna sit with Mage on this. There's GOBS of potential here. Put it away and look at it again in a week.
Re: light [edited] by lmp	INTRANSIT 65.29.60.146	4-Jul-07/7:18 AM
Good on you for sicking with it. I know the facts, but what if you substituted a peach instead. The colors mix better. Grapefruits tend to be more defined. Not to mention it's an acidic fruit. Ah the challenge of haiku.
Re: a comment on What the log book doesn't show by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 65.29.60.146	4-Jul-07/7:07 AM
You're close, Imp. I drive a truck for a living. Car hauler to be exact. The log book is literally flat, and lined. The gubment requires we "track" our work on a daily basis. This leaves a lot of room for personal things. The blue or red ink marks would be blood. Transparent links: what you feel for your spouse when away. I figured I'd tell you so you don't have to read all my old garbage to figure it out. Thanks for your time. Does it read like a list ?
Re: What the log book doesn't show by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 64.140.228.101	4-Jul-07/4:29 AM
Great stuff. I love stanzas 4 and 6. Keep up the good work--this site needs it.
Re: a comment on Bonded by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.132.59	3-Jul-07/7:26 PM
I'm his maiden - I check in now and then, make reports, receive new assignments and tend to needs...
Re: What the log book doesn't show by INTRANSIT	Skamper 202.6.132.59	3-Jul-07/7:15 PM
that's poetry - brilliant
Re: Lamb of God by Edna Sweetlove	Skamper 202.6.132.59	3-Jul-07/7:02 PM
at least she gave it's arse a break
Re: a comment on Deeper by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.132.59	3-Jul-07/6:53 PM
Yes
Re: Summer Festival by Christof	Nicholas Jones 86.141.26.195	3-Jul-07/11:30 AM
This is actually rather lovely. I see that you too are enjoying the great British summer. The irony of using the word 'flood' to refer to the sun rather than the water is nicely done.
Re: Consider the Grass by Dovina	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.192.121	3-Jul-07/8:50 AM
Pretentious.
Re: turd cutter by Count Flatula	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.192.121	3-Jul-07/8:49 AM
I just re-read this. I don't know why.
Re: Operation Candy Apple Tango by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.192.121	3-Jul-07/8:47 AM
As subtle as a 10 inch dick on a midget.
Re: Bitter by Ranger	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.192.121	3-Jul-07/8:46 AM
What a touching piece of writing. The reader is transported to a new world and the poet should be transported too.
Re: What the log book doesn't show by INTRANSIT	lmp 141.154.134.3	3-Jul-07/8:31 AM
i think s6 sums up the entire message succinctly. s2 is a bit confusing: flatlines EKG, but no ink marks. and transparent links (as in weblinks)...? i do like the analogies between your own vessel and that of an automobile. i am guessing the "logbook" is the recordings of a GPS device, and that someone rather upset/ill is driving around concerend for their well being. dunno. i like the images and am intrigued by the "story".
Re: Nothing to See Here (Rant) by Skamper	INTRANSIT 65.29.60.146	3-Jul-07/8:17 AM
I see potential beyond the break beat. I'd like to see you work this poem. w/h vote.
Re: Consider the Grass by Dovina	INTRANSIT 65.29.60.146	3-Jul-07/8:01 AM
There's still some trimming to be done. Resilient, a lesson, can go. Possibly- efficient, as well. Like the silo as a cola can. Maybe not so much awe. Just watching, I think would be better.
Re: Pot Haikus (Ode to Stoners) by Shardik	lmp 141.154.134.3	3-Jul-07/7:55 AM
spliff-er-riffic!
Re: Lick up your ears by Dental Panic	Ranger 86.131.62.243	3-Jul-07/2:43 AM
Wow - I just rediscovered this little gem. 'Today I've decided I wasn't killed. No way' is the best thing I've read for some time. Glorious, and favourited.