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replying on A Poem by BigB
9 Sep 2004, 5:09 AM
There is also a distinction between "A more descriptive title might have X" and "Maybe a more descriptive title might have X".
A. I say: "You might like it". I am saying that there is a possibility of you liking it.
B. I say: "Maybe you might like it". I am saying that there may or may not be a possibility of you liking it.
But there is a distinction between "misunderstanding someone" and "failing to know what someone means".
A. You say: "Ooonscallashihough". You use the word to mean "dung". I think you use the word to mean antelope. I have misunderstood you.
B. You say: "Ooonscallashihough". You use the word to mean "dung". I have never heard the word before and cannot even begin to guess what it means. I fail to know what you mean.
Now do you see the difference? You are an exceptionally foolish young man.
That was the point.
Was isn't an adverb. It's a linking verb.
Your examples are not grammatically similar to "delicate was".
Do not be so pathetic. It is clear what is wrong with this poem. It is long and incredibly dull due to a number of abstractions and forced almost soundless rhymes. I would be willing to bet the 'intelligent' advice from elsewhere went a little bit like this: 'oh, blue magpie, you are so talented, I love everything about this apart from the imprecision of word choice, the triteness of trying to define life in a few lines (which oh my god appear to rhyme), and its dull rambling.
Hi Wilco,
Thanks for the welcome. Its been a while since I have visited here, or anywhere. I have rewritten the above a good deal since posting it, although the more intelligent feedback came from elsewhere.
The bottom line is that smoking is cool and you know it. If you damn nonsmokers would take the time to learn how to smoke, you'd realize how good it really is.
In all seriousness, though, it's not a bad poem but you really need to spell check it.
Very pretty. Grows a bit stale in a couple of spots and there are some forced rhymes, but overall I like it. Been a while since I've seen you on here. Welcome back.
It's open to interpretation. And who says it's a she?
Why is she/he screaming your name?
Is it the danger or the size of your penis?
I found the hidden message!Is it you markedly suck?
Stick to cooking Chef KSP!
You'll never be talented,
You'll always ramble,
You'll want to become more than just a moron,
You'll feel better when you quit posting this crap.
The only thing owed me is a swift kick.
Question was asked, I pointed in the right direction. If that means I'm assuming someone was guilty of being hopelessly dim and unworthy, then I guess I'm such a judgemental bastard.
Your Welcome dear,
<3 Jason
No offence - but please try a different form of expression.Poetry is just not your cup of tea.
Are you for real?
I Will Always Feel Complete While Your In My Life.
Yep.
I don't know. I couldn't get myself to finish the whole thing.
Silent Scream is such an easy oxymoron.