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Who'd suspect?

by thepinkbunnyofdoom

Member since 2003 · Posted 7 Sep 2004 · Edited 7 Sep 2004 · 7 comments

Live tonight and come with me out on the town is where we'll be no one will say girl where have you been? On the hill we'll ride down into valleys and riversides, just me and you evening air rushing fast red lights left somewhere flashing behind our backs Driving out of view, so that I can be alone with you under this maple tree the grass lined with due eventually I'm sure they'll find what remains

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[9] Dovina 7-Sep-04/10:39 AM Reply
You've convince me. I'd love to. Just a few clean-ups would make your offer perfect. Please say either "will" or "can" in the third line, I'm so enamored I don't care which. And please tell me if there is something due you or if there is just dew on the grass. As for what reamins of me, that's tomorrow, this is tonight. Gosh, is my lipstick smeared?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Dovina 7-Sep-04/10:48 AM Reply
Several meaning on the due. It could refer to her blood lining the grass like dew. Or it could refer to orgasmic body fluids. All depends on your perspective and how you interpert it.
[9] Dovina › thepinkbunnyofdoom 7-Sep-04/11:00 AM Reply
Oh, I hate these confusions. Would you please just be forthright. You spelled it due, so there must be something I owe you.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Dovina 8-Sep-04/4:31 PM Reply
The only thing owed me is a swift kick.
[n/a] zodiac › thepinkbunnyofdoom 8-Sep-04/1:08 AM Reply
Do you intend to provide these extratextual explanations with all copies of your poem, or will you just assume that anyone who doesn't get it is hopelessly dim and unworthy?

Thanks.
[9] Dovina › zodiac 8-Sep-04/10:21 AM Reply
That's the ultimate in dimness, a colossal blob of balogne blubber! I'm learning. Ain't it great.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › zodiac 8-Sep-04/4:31 PM Reply
Question was asked, I pointed in the right direction. If that means I'm assuming someone was guilty of being hopelessly dim and unworthy, then I guess I'm such a judgemental bastard.

Your Welcome dear,
<3 Jason