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Dare (Free verse) by LintyWeenis The lights screaming by
tonight is our night.
My foot to the floor
you're screaming my name.
Like so many times before
Let's see if we make it
this time.
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Posted: September 8, 2004 2:42 PM PDT; Last modified: September 8, 2004 2:42 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.4444447 Overall Rank: 750 Comments:
It's open to interpretation. And who says it's a she?
Saying that it's open to interpretation is saying the obvious, whether you explain or not. To simply say you're not going to explain is to send me away wondering, unless you think it's so obvious I should know your meaning. Seems to me it needs a lot of help in grammar and clarity.
Well, I say it's open to interpretation because if someone reads it and thinks that this person is screaming out of excitement, well then that's what they get. I personally wrote it with that person screaming in fear because I'm about to go hallin' ass down a busy freeway. I can see where I could use some clarity but grammar?
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Is it the danger or the size of your penis?