Re: Hurt by Cougarchic	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:09 PM
very nice. A good read.
Re: Void and Vitality by MacFrantic	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:08 PM
I liked the deepness of this.
Re: Stand by me by Cougarchic	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:06 PM
I liked the ending verse. To plain need more of a messeage.
Re: Paid In Full by NoSage	Joi 207.119.185.153	26-Aug-07/11:05 PM
It is true that they will find their way in time. I liked the thought put into this one. I didn't care for their father made the grade. I sounds to cocky. But all in all very interesting thought process.
Re: The Dark Poet by Dovina	drnick 24.247.158.152	26-Aug-07/8:55 PM
It is those who are in darkness that see light most clearly.
Re: Life by Joi	Dovina 70.133.45.227	26-Aug-07/8:21 PM
It starts as description and ends as sermon. I think it would be more compelling to describe the feeling for those in need rather than telling us to do it, what it's like to soar through life rather than saying we should soar.
Re: a comment on Sylvania Wilderness by jessicazee	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	25-Aug-07/9:19 AM
But then, most people ARE in the majority.
Re: The Buiness Card by abecedarian	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	25-Aug-07/6:53 AM
Duh, whassa Tamp tie ?
Re: a comment on Church Propagation by Dovina	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	25-Aug-07/6:50 AM
" These degredations lead to arguments, which lead to stricter organization." The church chokes itself. I think this is the root of your poem. This format is too technical for me. Chase it if you will.
Re: a comment on Sylvania Wilderness by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	25-Aug-07/6:39 AM
That's just it. It becomes statistic and loses some of the personal feeling, for me. If it is accurate to her situation, nuttin I can do about that.
Re: Foreign film by richa	Dovina 12.173.121.144	24-Aug-07/3:37 PM
Enjamb if you want to, but I think a period is needed after flickering. Perhaps a title about subject matter; I know it's a film, but does that really matter? I think the second verse is better than the first because of the nebulous fascist reference.
Re: Passive Birth Control by http://mulberryfairy	Dovina 12.173.121.144	24-Aug-07/3:30 PM
You use some unusual words: devotement (devotion, perhaps); devout as a noun (but it works); redounded (a more common word might do better). Overall, it's a novel thing and therefore good.
Re: a comment on Church Propagation by Dovina	Dovina 12.173.121.144	24-Aug-07/3:21 PM
Oh, but I listen to him; he makes some good points. Thanks for stopping by.
Re: a comment on Church Propagation by Dovina	Dovina 12.173.121.144	24-Aug-07/3:20 PM
I am happy you are piqued and offended. It’s a sign of success. But why should it be because you are a Christian? Observe that as a church forgets the truth of the Gospel, it usually compensates with observances in fake religion which Jesus would have lashed out at, possibly with a whip. The religion of His day had degraded into a form which we can lump into the dirty word “piety.” “You can't know wisdom, but you can be it, at ease in your own life.” Tao Te Ching. As wisdom in the church wanes, compensation comes in cleverness and knowledge. I just observe these things happening; it is not a position statement as you seem to think. These degradations lead to arguments, which lead to stricter organization. If the situation degrades into strife and chaos, then a portion of the people leave and form another church. Thanks for your comment.
Re: a comment on Passive Birth Control by http://mulberryfairy	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	24-Aug-07/3:16 PM
How come?
Re: a comment on Passive Birth Control by http://mulberryfairy	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	24-Aug-07/3:15 PM
thanks
Re: Sylvania Wilderness by jessicazee	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	24-Aug-07/3:09 PM
I like the last line; their scents are a cliche in themselves, pre-packaged and all, and I like that you refused to acknowledge their other scent ingredients. How cliche is it,really, when perhaps 25% of the population use those products? When is it cliche, and when is it just statistically accurate?
Re: a comment on The Raw Vegan Potluck by peaceseeker	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	24-Aug-07/3:03 PM
I agree w/ Intransit, and think the last sentence is out of place. The food descriptions are vivid enough that is doesn't need to be structured this way.
Re: a comment on The Buiness Card by abecedarian	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	24-Aug-07/2:59 PM
Does poor spelling make him illiterate? That is such a constrictive definition of the word. If so, half of our fellow poets are. I think this is a real character who is being fairly and poetically represented.-10
Re: Church Propagation by Dovina	http://mulberryfairy 207.5.159.9	24-Aug-07/2:48 PM
I like the whole package, don't listen to the theist sheep.