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Life (Free verse) by Joi Life is like spring
it brings to all good things
For those that truly care
life will always be there
When things go bad
When you are sad
stop and think of all you have
When times are happy and good
think of others as you should
Feel for those in need
give to those who can't achieve
Soar through life and be free
As a child of God be all you can be.
Up the ladder:
Life is my agony
Down the ladder:
happy *clap* thanksgiving
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Posted: August 26, 2007 2:35 AM PDT; Last modified: August 26, 2007 2:35 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10256 Comments:
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Dovina @ 70.133.45.227
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26-Aug-07/8:21 PM
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It starts as description and ends as sermon. I think it would be more compelling to describe the feeling for those in need rather than telling us to do it, what it's like to soar through life rather than saying we should soar.
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