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Foreign film (Free verse) by richa I had no idea you were a fascist under that soft Spanish skin and those
syllables. When that man shouted you down he was I and I could not have
you let me off without flickering, rage
is close to sadness and I could not love the whores of Tijuana deeply
or the beautiful apostates if they did not rage at the handsome storm
that blew brutish through true America.
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Broken for Completion
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Baggage
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Posted: August 12, 2007 1:34 PM PDT; Last modified: August 14, 2007 2:33 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5885 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.173.121.144
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24-Aug-07/3:37 PM
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Enjamb if you want to, but I think a period is needed after flickering. Perhaps a title about subject matter; I know it's a film, but does that really matter? I think the second verse is better than the first because of the nebulous fascist reference.
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