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Out Of My Mind (Free verse) by Enchantres
The sun goes slowly under My beautiful horizon There's a thunder, everything will turn pitch black And I'm scared, because I can't read you at all Where are your arms, when I get lonely? Those who holding me tightly And don't let go, those who are warm and gentle I can't feel them at all They were never there Only in my mind And it's still dark, and I'm still scared But then I realise, I wake up I see the sun rising up again in the South A beautiful light who made me see everything Everything I didn't wanted to see The thunder is over, so are you No more joy, no more grief No more pretending Words can no longer hurt Your pitch black, your out of my mind

Up the ladder: Spanish Woman
Down the ladder: Return from Dubious Mission

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5870
Posted: August 24, 2004 12:29 PM PDT; Last modified: August 24, 2004 12:29 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.130.62.63 | 24-Aug-04/11:54 PM | Reply
Yep, "there's a thunder" brewing below my chaps.
It's almost my turn in the pie aborting contest.
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 65.45.152.4 | 25-Aug-04/7:07 AM | Reply
To the point, clear and distinct. I could probly learn a thing or two there.. all mystic and doped as I am.. -noted-

Ah, yes, Blessed with eight.
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