dougsoderstrom
replying on War Story by dougsoderstrom
10 Jan 2005, 7:23 AM
I think you're right, good man.
Questions simply means issues, matters, concerns
Thanks Jason. Forced rhymes come from the difficulty of putting a philosophical question in verse but they help to reflect the gravity of the task.
Incidentally, the best existential question ever is: When the Lord finally lets fly that last great trump he's been whemying for 2000 million years, will we remain in possession of our ears long enough to hear it and fall to the ground under the force of its too-many-parted harmonies, or will we instantly be turned into souls, to be blown this way and that by the terrible and everlasting gusts of wind that follow?
None of these lines are actually questions. I'd change the title. Or just insert questions marks more or less at random for a neat question-y effect. For example:
Relativity is Absolute? Absolute is Relative?
And Eternity is? beyond the livi?ng formative.
What, if anything, came out of Jesu's eggs?
In case you can't tell, I'm genuinely curious.
re: "But I did my best to pretend what war "might be like." "
In all seriousness, were you and are you in favor of the Iraq War?
It went to your "Bumtwixt and Bumtween" poem, where it properly belonged.
Which of the following best describes your opinion of Yoda:
1) So fucking smart he doesn't need to properly grammatize he's got a lightsaber and he can jump around and shit.
2) Probably from some race congenitally ill-disposed toward English grammar, but otherwise pretty smart cookies all of them.
3) Maybe colossally stupid, but in that way that usually makes people think he's wiser than them, like the Maharishi or something.
For another thing, I know very well how Yoda talks.
For another thing, "you only write comments you don't write poems so I'm better than you because I can barely hold onto my load for the two-day limit without whemying all over" is simply the least-funny jape of last year. And shame on you for getting Dovina doing it too. After all the time I've spent working with her.
-bum-
Q: Can you think of anything which cannot be described as "holding together on an emotional level"?
Q2: Bunk. I know that's not a question.
Q3: I have an advanced degree in knowing what any kind of writer thinks and believes, which I obtained at an Accredited Poetry School. The question is, how can YOU be so confident in knowing what you think and believe?
Blather. Utter, utter blather.
Q: Do you know any other greek words for love besides "agape"?
A: Of course not (though if you don't look them up now you're fucking gay). You just heard there was this ace Greek word for love, agape, and figured they must have all these different gradations like eskimos do for "bum" and "walrus bum". Bow'ls.
And incidentally, calling "agape" greek is dumb; you might as well call "love" Indo-European.
Love,
zodiac
PS-In case you're wondering, the other Greek words for love are, roughly, "Gay love", "sheep love", "Muskrat love" (ie, "As seen on TV Greek pan-flute love"), "Big Fat Greek Love", "like-love but not love", and "love so pure I shit just thinking about it".
The images don't seem to be connected very well, but I liked the ending.
lol now that was moving. Thanks. =)
Damn, what I wouldn't give for a drunken down on his luck suicidal wino right now, a crayon, and some extra copies of this this to draw on the back of in case he has a couple of buddies :0
In other words, very moving
<3 Jason
Forced rhyme helps drive it well.
<3 Jason
aweomse! this is totally aweseome! i love it!
-megan
i like this ....
-mega
Quite nice. A good sign is that I fairly quickly moved past the form of the poem (although the comma's are slightly... distracting - at least a learning curve) right to the content.
I found this interesting, "I fumbled with childhood doors/As firmly shut against me as she is" yet in both cases (the door and the girl) you have the keys in your mouth.
An enjoyable, mature piece.
What does that mean in context to the poem??
Great Job.