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Runaway (Free verse) by Cairsten
She changes faces for me like I changed my body for her,
A shifting aside of organs and a spreading of skin
(But leave the bones untouched)
I shaped her bones, I formed her marrow --
What is her face, to me?
I clutch at her, a stripped and trembling branch
Clinging to this last bronzed leaf,
And she whirls away.
It seems a cruelty in her,
(the rejection stinging in my mouth like the taste of brass keys
Held against my tongue while I fumbled with childhood doors
As firmly shut against me as she is),
this flaunted refusal
To snuggle close, to rest in my arms
And let me enfold her in myself.
And so by night I chase her,
Down clattering cobblestone lanes of regret
Through thorn-filled savannahs named "what if?"
And to elude me, her mother,
She changes faces.
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5954
Posted: January 9, 2005 1:44 AM PST; Last modified: January 9, 2005 1:44 AM PST
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I found this interesting, "I fumbled with childhood doors/As firmly shut against me as she is" yet in both cases (the door and the girl) you have the keys in your mouth.
An enjoyable, mature piece.