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Men & Forget me not's (Free verse) by Mona Lisa
Man is no open bouquet And blooms only in himself. He is beauty fed by filth Soiled by being grounded. He has seeds but no roots Sits in a vase of pixels Envying forget me not’s Amok in freedom In cots of color. Dressed to the nines in nine to five He bleeds in to water Under strip lights barely alive Bowing his overgrown but once proud head To curled petals on the filing cabinet Keen to be admired Always replaced And more alive when dead.

Up the ladder: change (3rd draft)
Down the ladder: precipitation

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5956
Posted: March 17, 2004 11:58 AM PST; Last modified: March 17, 2004 11:58 AM PST
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[8] richa @ 81.178.226.43 | 18-Mar-04/1:30 AM | Reply
Good, like the first verse especially. Sounds right, metaphor carried through.

Don't really understand the final line though.
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