richa
replying on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina
3 Feb 2005, 3:18 PM
God is not one of us, we can't go around talking like he is some flawed individual who probably will not live up to our expectations. Jesus. Did you know that God is so great he can create a box that can not be escaped from.
I liked the apples line very much. It's like one of those delightful, bursting with child-like joy unexepected lines eec was so good at surprising you with.
Loved it. Beautiful and wistful. God I'm a sucker for wistful. I think you're channeling "Anonymous" again in this piece, lol, it's got that timeless feel (You know, Anonymous the "small rain" guy)
kill "slip sibilant." It's clever & reflexive -- which is completely out of place in the mood of the piece.
Perhaps I agree the last fractious line oughtn't be so altered. I'm not sure. Suppose you could say something like "with the feeling your home, girl,...". But you've certainly earned the right to mess with forms however you like...
Blindpoetry
replying on Ducks With AIDs (a feeble attempt of something different) by Blindpoetry
3 Feb 2005, 12:55 PM
I've heard a similar joke.
Only...without the AIDS part. o_0;
Having trouble following this. Postulates are not proven, maybe that's the point. I like the first line.
What a poet will do to stick to a form!
The problem with your definition of God is that you base it on reasons for God. Our reasons for God always develop from our perceived need for God. Such thinking leads its opponents to say things like, âMan created God in his own image.â If we can get away from projecting onto God what we want Him to be, we stand a better chance of understanding what He might really be like.
Dear Prince, void of words,
Thanks
It was for none of your presumed reasons, and empowerment for women is nonsense.
Funny, nentwined never pisplaces my comments. Why yours?
I can't explain ...i passed the borders of words ....
so dont ask me why ...but i love what you have written down
because your poem {a thing i must do } meant a lot to me ..Dovina
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Of course I know what averages are. What a long and silly way of saying I don't.
By saying I am merely one of a "kind" you exclude yourself any meaningful discussion.
I didn't say that they stop being athiests. You are probably right in saying that confirmed athiests stay that way in the face of death. But a person who has religious inclinations, even if they are supressed and/or denied, well, I've seen those come to the surface on a deathbed.
If I had the time, I'd gather all your prior declarations of nonfaith and set them beside this Confession of Faith. Then I'd ask mysely why I take anything you say seriously. Perhaps, like poetry, "guff" is the way you would describe all this talk about religion and faith.
Bluemonkey
replying on Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni
3 Feb 2005, 10:40 AM
I have no delusions that I have an ounce of talent in the field of poetry. I do, however, know poetry. Being unable to write does not mean being unable to read.
I like this. I have no idea what it's about, but I like it.
-1 because this is really kind of boring, but it's beautifully said.
This doesn't really make any sense, but it sounds ok.