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Enrapture (Free verse) by fevriere Arch, arabesque; the painful points of reach and touch
Burn lines through the mind. You mine of beauty, you;
I have fallen in, given the grace of Grace.
Up the ladder:
Mittens
Down the ladder:
Heather
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Posted: February 3, 2005 9:26 AM PST; Last modified: February 3, 2005 9:26 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.537883 Overall Rank: 2543 Comments:
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Bluemonkey @ 170.141.68.99
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3-Feb-05/10:08 AM
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This doesn't really make any sense, but it sounds ok.
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Goad @ 217.226.22.139
> Bluemonkey
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3-Feb-05/1:34 PM
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lol. perhaps if you looked up the words in a dictionary?
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fevriere @ 62.254.128.4
> Goad
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3-Feb-05/3:08 PM
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No. He's quite right, it's not saying much.
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Goad @ 217.226.22.139
> fevriere
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3-Feb-05/4:13 PM
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well, it has many allusions for me. Were you aware of the double meaning of your own pome? because an arabesque in ballet often accompanies a long beat, and the transition to/from another form involves arching/flattening the arch of the foot, accompanied by a grace note. So every main word in the pome has a double meaning -- two parallel images, complementing each other. Sent chills down my spine. Painful points -- also fits both the dance metaphor and the meaning of arabesque arch as an arch decorated with an angular motif of stylized leaves & vines.
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fevriere @ 62.254.128.4
> Goad
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5-Feb-05/1:13 AM
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I had no idea - I always just thought an arabesque was a painful-looking but delicate stretch. Thank you!
Very clever, and quite sweet. A grace note indeed.
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