i really like this -megan

That's pretty much it. God is strong, infallible, doesn't wear shoes, male. Nature is nurturing and female. Not exactly subtle though. It merely reflects beliefs held as our language evolved.

Shock endings involving tragic illness, death, are not my bag, they lack subtlety. I would also suggest that the quoted bit is made less clunky to sound more like natural speech.

I'm having a bit of trouble with the metaphor here. The teacher is metaphorically holding a pistol to your head by forcing you to write. 'And then I would forge you a sword to be used against me later.' It is unclear why the effect of holding a pistol to your head would 'forge a sword' or how that sword could be used against you. The end is fine, although I missed that you wanted pushing to write first time (it seemed unexpected).

I think you need to stop being so angry. The anger in this poem is the worst type of anger, dull anger. All this talk of in-crowd and rules, dull, dull, dull and the least said about the ending the better. The first verse was quite well constructed I thought, the poem did lose its discipline afterwards though.

seems a too have a touch of fruedian psychology - i like it -megan

it is nice - i like this - but as others have posted before - i think that this is one of lifes unanswered questions - -megan

not your best work by far - i think that if this was sung and hade a really creative tune it would work but as simple words it seems slightly lacking - 8 - -megan

i like this - it actually reminds me of something i wrote - in fact the theme is very similar (perhaps great minds think alike?) :) you could make it a little bit better if you sharped some of the edges and played with your word choice, but it is overall very nicely done - 9 - -megan

i really really like this you tell it well -megan p.s. - you are here because you obviously like to wright poetry - so i ask you this why not put her name in the books and the learned memory of those around the world?

i like this but it is a bit too much all at once i think that the concrete block of words may make people less likely to read it - perhaps if you broke if up into verses or stanzas regardless it was good - megan

nice - i like this alot - -megan

i like this - but i must say i disagree the answers are never in any one else but yourself, and if you are not finding them then you may not be ready to know - but i don't think, even though we would all like to believe otherwise, that the answers can be found in any other person -megan

this is very good because it says what the person is thinking.