zodiac
on Your New Apartment by jessicazee
12 Mar 2005, 11:19 PM
Wicked.
Does anyone really wonder if beggars are worse than advertisers? Jesus.
Actually this is about one of my little sister's friends hitting on me.
Is this why you keep reposting that wretched "Pumped Up" poem?
This is simply awful. Can I make a recommendation? Please visit these poetry links:
http://www.favoritepoem.org/poems/index. html
http://www.slate.com/id/2114499/
http://www.poemranker.com/index.jsp
And read until your eyeballs rupture. That's the only way your going to get close to writing a poem worth criticising. I'm not trying to be hard on you, by the way; that's seriously what everybody who wants to write presentable poetry has to do, and it shows in this poem that you haven't done it. Good luck, and let me know how it comes out!
-zodiac
What a sad story... -10-
And PS-If you were ever seriously confronted by the possibility that we weren't some roving gange of hooligans unreasonably banded together against you, but instead were sincerely and independently disgusted at the amount of muck illogic, bad grammar, email-forward subphilosophy, cronyism, and simply awful poetry you perpetrate on this site, would you jump screaming into your own uterus? I bet you would.
Your life is very dramatic. -10-
"Little sparrow, little sparrow,
Precious fragile little thing
Little sparrow, little sparrow
Flies so high and feels no pain."
- Dolly Parton
"Who will love a little Sparrow?
Who's traveled far and cries for rest?
'Not I,' said the Oak Tree,
'I won't share my branches with
no sparrow's nest,
And my blanket of leaves won't warm
her cold breast.'
Who will love a little Sparrow
And who will speak a kindly word?
'Not I,' said the Swan,
'The entire idea is utterly absurd,
I'd be laughed at and scorned if the
other Swans heard.'"
- Paul Simon
If you've ever been closer to Amsterdam than Sacramento, I'm a cold cock. What I'm trying to say is, it shows.
zodiac
replying on an unbiased voice (or the most biased one you'll hear) by i_am_the_popsicle
12 Mar 2005, 10:43 PM
What do you mean by "here"? Are you in Iraq?
1) Would you say you're more, or less, opinionated than other people?
2) Hey, thanks for pointing out that it's biased. I might have gone the rest of my life believing slate.com was a fair and balanced news source.
3) Unfortunately it's biased toward the side you're supposed to be on (pretty moderate liberalism), and it still thinks you're one of them.
4) And Slate writers are about a dozen times smarter than you.
5) I would be horrified at the suggestion (from anyone, really, except you) that I was either a hopeless conservative hick or shared qualities with hopeless conservative hicks. But then, I'm not the one the article's describing. You are.
6) And thanks a lot for demonstrating how bow'ls isn't a real usage, how the "renegade poet comedians" you hate now are somehow different from the stuffy bastions of conservative poetry you hated a few months ago, or anything else to justify anything in this post. You're a total clod when it comes to arguing anything.
I rarely say this because it's a bum rule, but Show, don't Tell.
Not really a poem.
2buckchuck&awinesnob. This is a lovely cock-tale of deceit.-10-
i_am_the_popsicle
replying on an unbiased voice (or the most biased one you'll hear) by i_am_the_popsicle
12 Mar 2005, 5:18 PM
no one is commending saddam here, though perhaps the women should............(they got more rights then they do now).........
why thankyou
that wouldnt be much to brag about -
lia
of course i read your comment -
lia