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The Lonely Man (Free verse) by i_am_the_popsicle I think we forget how lucky we are
just to be able to live in the world
of the lonely man
and the silent god
frankly I'd rather fair my chances among men
think back to the antedeluvian masses
thay never did stand a chance did they,
how could one man be all good,
how could one family eradicate evil,
how could One Omnipotenet all knowing being
make a mistake,
how could He ever even be heard as saying
"I made a mistake"
"I have a regret"
He can be harsh
He can be cruel
don't you forget that their
are
two
testaments
and He clearly has
more than one face
Up the ladder:
Alone
Down the ladder:
99% of the Time
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Posted: March 9, 2005 2:32 PM PST; Last modified: March 9, 2005 2:32 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.833116 Overall Rank: 10795 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.7.90
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12-Mar-05/5:46 PM
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I rarely say this because it's a bum rule, but Show, don't Tell.
How could an omnipotent, omniscient being make a mastake? Two words: Free Willy.
This is a bulging turnip.
"Frankly I'd rather fair my chances among men." What could this mean? their? "their are two testaments." Please pick out the egregious crime against language contained this phrase. clearly "testaments" should be "testicles" 201 view(s)
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