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on Memories of a Suicidal Sophomore by CemeteryBuffsOnline
29 Mar 2005, 10:21 PM
What???
What did you do with the knife, then?
Q: Then why didn't you say "a failed murder" instead?
Q2: Generally speaking, would you say a suicide can be accidental?
That's funny, considering the title is taken almost word-for-word from the poem, while your titles are unfailingly wooshes of babble.
More of a failed murder, that results in the death of the would be murder by mistake. Focus more on the images of an evil eye, and a mirror.
What do you mean by 'average'? Oh, that they have individual characteristics. Hey, good call.
Because surely you can't mean 'as averagely intelligent as you and I'. Since that's what retarded means: lower than average intelligence.
PS-"as average as you and I" is really great if you think about it drunk or for longer than ten seconds.
Is God responsible for things one man thinks good and another evil?
Oh.
You retard. Of all the people involved in this poem, would you consider yourself MORE in the lines of
a) the wicked (ie, also ironic quoter of Asaph), or
b) the pure-hearted?
YOU CAN'T ANSWER "NONE". THAT IS AN ABSOLUTELY IMPOSSIBLE ANSWER EXCEPT AS "EXTREME RETARD AEROBATICS". And have you noticed that every time I ask you to take a position on something, you answer that you have no position. Do you consider yourself "wily" and "Socratic"?
The cross is awful. The poem is awful.
238 does not rhyme with rat. -0-
No it's not. Have you asked anyone what the crucifix is a symbol for?
Here, I will:
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QUESTION FOR THE AUDIENCE
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Q: What is the crucifix a symbol for?
I suspect the only music you make is in your billowing bloomers.
Wouldn't it suck if Janice committed suicide? lol
This is a strong sentiment, if not exactly a poem. Try to avoid cliches, i.e. "Janice is my rock, my hope, my strength, my life." The narrator seems to struggle with individualism, so it hurts when she chooses such common, trite phrasing.
This would be twice as good if it were half as long. There's not _that_ much here.
IMHO, the "friends and lovers" theme has been done to death. This undermines an otherwise decent poem.
I don't get it. If it's an accidental suicide, then why is one person on the floor and the other clutching his/her chest? Is it a murder-suicide? A double suicide? Or does the chest-clutching mean something other than death?
Easily the best poem of yours that I've read. Perhaps I'll visit your archives....
Baron Bumforth's "Brownford Hammer"
Makes him a truly first-class rammer.
Earl Cliveby, on the other hand,
Simply slaps them with his gland.
Your title is a misleading welcome mat to young men wishing to learn the gentlemanly arts. Instead of the promised guidance, you relate vile acts of uncouth pseudo-gentlemen, lending no redeeming importance to the telling, such as recommending their castration. May I suggest a rewrite along the lines of flowers, opened doors, candles, and soft, respectful words.
You, young man, are considered a dim from both sides of the aisle.