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Against the Gorgon (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
If looks could kill then I'd be lying on the floor As you fell over clutching your chest A victim of smoke and mirrors And I'd wonder what it felt like To see the gun that got me Fired by my own hand An accidental suicide I'm surprised things like this Don't happen more often

Up the ladder: The Sleep Fantastic
Down the ladder: Lonely Tears

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.375
Weighted score: 5.907677
Overall Rank: 1451
Posted: March 28, 2005 9:11 AM PST; Last modified: March 28, 2005 9:11 AM PST
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[7] poodietat @ 68.51.106.137 | 29-Mar-05/8:52 PM | Reply
I don't get it. If it's an accidental suicide, then why is one person on the floor and the other clutching his/her chest? Is it a murder-suicide? A double suicide? Or does the chest-clutching mean something other than death?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.24.123 > poodietat | 29-Mar-05/10:05 PM | Reply
More of a failed murder, that results in the death of the would be murder by mistake. Focus more on the images of an evil eye, and a mirror.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.19.105 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 29-Mar-05/10:17 PM | Reply
Q: Then why didn't you say "a failed murder" instead?

Q2: Generally speaking, would you say a suicide can be accidental?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.24.123 > zodiac | 29-Mar-05/11:53 PM | Reply
A1: Because looks much as I call them such, are not weapons, by which anyone has ever bled.

A2: Not really. Most people I tend to at least need a plan to kill themselves, a will, and that one last bitter spitful note speaking of the tragic irony that is life, blah blah, I hate you mother, see you in heaven(idiots).

<3 Jason
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.19.178 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 31-Mar-05/5:39 AM | Reply
Q3: That's illegible. Would you care to try again? (HINT: Looks aren't suicide implements either, except in your backward notion of suicide, which we should define for the sake of future comments in this string as "almost anything dramatic and self-glorifying as long as it doesn't involve actual death")

Q4: That's because you're a preteen. And why did you write a poem about suicide then?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.225.145.53 > zodiac | 31-Mar-05/2:12 PM | Reply
A3: Suicide is the ending of ones own life. Here it was done accidentally.

A4: Am I a preteen, or is that all you'll let yourself see me as? Its not about suicide, that was merely what you chose to focus on.
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