sliver
on Don't Say You Understand by cuddlytiger17
2 Jun 2004, 8:55 PM
I don't understand ;)
Yes Bratsy, you are not alone. Try living with the memories here.
is that what them meaninf of life is to you? sitting around getting tan with a beer? and you think thats why God put you here? how shallow
sheep sheep,
we dont wanna hear a peep,
keep it to yourself,
before i ralf
Is 'is' suppose to be 'as', or is 'grows' suppose to be 'growing'? Otherwise, I think your poem is very good.
Cool-Whipe
what is up with the ones and sixes??? i think this is the best of your poetry that i have read. darkness lurks somewhere in a scene artfully painted.
i wont say ugh, but i will say a bit verbose, and the fact that it was intentional doesnt make it any more the readable, sire. courtesy 8
and because no way does it deserve the one and the three...need a balance.
Funny how children can make you completely reconsider your idea of life huh? 10
Fanf'ntastic. I could hear the coronet staining in the background and taste the agave worm.
Good imagery,I think tadpole refers to baptism. When ya gonna submit some more?
hmmm.
This is poetry? really? don't want to hurt your feelings man, but this don't cut it, not at all. I won't vote
A sad commentary on todays youth.
wow, first, good poem as far as structure, but imagine how much better our society would be if we based our heroism on stuff that mattered? like Saints and living for God. where does rodoe get you after your dead?
re: "Monotonous is King and Sorrow is his Queen."
Jesus, man! Those aren't even the same species! Just imagine all the deformed forms they would give birth to! Adjenouns! Prepoverbs! Adjunctions!!!1!