Doug
on Heat by Shardik
11 Jun 2004, 6:27 PM
I was asleep by the third line!Very lame.
In the house, even. *urk*
Godswife why are you so bitter? you really need to get a life outside of lame internet sites...really!
Professionally Pregnant.
Change "hope" to Pope, and then I believe you'll still have fleck, but it will be HOLY fleck.
A Parson's Nose By Sir Nudely Of Niggerly
Past your nose you will spot,
a parson that is for you to cot...
and felch for the viewing of the Abbot.
A parson who's always there, never busy,with a pear.
"who will put you on a pedestal;"
The right place for you to be lubed
and twhen tyou're twogwether,
the tworld twould twop,
Uranus shall pull;
and retrograde
and the parson would then palm-aid
both of your nose.
though far apart thy cheeks
Norwegian wood, should arise...
that parson would keep you in their heart,
with his nose betwixt your thighs
querries would be answered,
stains queerly erased.
and from the parson's love stuff floweth,
like mountain fresh springs, and HOT GAY SEX.
I'm a degenerate fool.
wow, this is amazing!!!
'Struggling...strangled by hands of chance(and clocks)'
You're so insightful, you know, you really have your thumb on the pulse of life.
I especially like the way you capitalized Fate and Time, really drives the message home.
Welcome to poemranker! :)
smack dab in the middle-wow you are brilliant!
You sure know your flowers!
A shitaco with extra snips of shredded ass.
Waiting to hear of a loved ones death? or a birth?
nice word caryatids.
I like this - I think it would be better for the killing of some of the small words (the conjuctions and little preps - but I often say this).
I like haggard/swaggered and the pun with drug and undertow.
"interiority of computers" - interesting.
Some fresh ideas here, but the form is hurting it imho; got me thinking on it.
The nuance of the spanish is lost on me, but I do like the sentiment (and I know you've spent a fair amount of time tweeking it - no, that's not a euphamism :).
I never contested my well fluffed homosexuality,
and if anything it adds more perfume to when I
state your work as being a crackling homerun of shit
humus