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Free verse № 104915

The Gray Idea

by Doug

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Jun 2004 · 11 comments

Crawling- forever slowly toward the womb, thickets of torper block our path, so we drudge through the thorns- to perception. Struggling- blindly- with Fate and Time, often strangled by hands of chance(and clocks) all the while kicking against together. Breathing- faint thin air of substance, a stillness reveals the feeble wheezing of removal, and between our breath and the Hope of real- lies the gray idea of a phantom.

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11 comments

[0] Shardik 11-Jun-04/3:32 PM Reply
A shitaco with extra snips of shredded ass.
[n/a] Doug › Shardik 11-Jun-04/5:55 PM Reply
Sharpdick you are a brilliant critic,I love your comments!Even thought they are a sad rebellion against your latent homo-sexuality,please try to be more graphic next time.Thank you very little.
[0] Shardik 11-Jun-04/6:01 PM Reply
I never contested my well fluffed homosexuality,
and if anything it adds more perfume to when I
state your work as being a crackling homerun of shit
[n/a] Doug › Shardik 11-Jun-04/6:11 PM Reply
Sharpdick you are a hilarious asshole keep em' cuming!
Besides my "work" took all of five minutes,so I doubt it's work
compared to your sad ramblings of longed for anal penetration!
[n/a] zodiac › Doug 11-Jun-04/10:52 PM Reply
"I wrote this poem in X minutes, therefore its immune to your criticism" is the buncombe dodge of an inverterate guffer.
[0] god'swife 11-Jun-04/7:38 PM Reply
wow, this is amazing!!!

'Struggling...strangled by hands of chance(and clocks)'

You're so insightful, you know, you really have your thumb on the pulse of life.

I especially like the way you capitalized Fate and Time, really drives the message home.

Welcome to poemranker! :)
[n/a] Doug › god'swife 11-Jun-04/7:42 PM Reply
Your so clever"god'swife" I wish you lived next door!
[n/a] zodiac › Doug 11-Jun-04/10:21 PM Reply
Are you a great ape trained to roughly approximate human typing?
[n/a] pain killer › zodiac 12-Jun-04/11:20 AM Reply
note the emphasis walter zodiac places on "roughly"

oh you wish big boy, you wish
[n/a] Doug › god'swife 11-Jun-04/7:50 PM Reply
My ego almost said thanks.
[0] horus8 11-Sep-04/2:16 PM Reply
A shit sandwich, hold the bread.