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The Gray Idea (Free verse) by Doug

Crawling- forever slowly toward the womb, thickets of torper block our path, so we drudge through the thorns- to perception. Struggling- blindly- with Fate and Time, often strangled by hands of chance(and clocks) all the while kicking against together. Breathing- faint thin air of substance, a stillness reveals the feeble wheezing of removal, and between our breath and the Hope of real- lies the gray idea of a phantom.

god'swife 11-Jun-04/7:38 PM
wow, this is amazing!!!

'Struggling...strangled by hands of chance(and clocks)'

You're so insightful, you know, you really have your thumb on the pulse of life.

I especially like the way you capitalized Fate and Time, really drives the message home.

Welcome to poemranker! :)




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