a darn sight better than voicing her swallows

Beautifully done. You paint quite a picture here.

This is haunting enough to send a shiver down Christopher Reeves spine. 1--1

How's that whole "better man" thing workin for ya? God is watching, my friend - God is watching.

Lincolnshire looks like a poo splattered tramp after a night on the gas which has been ironed as flat as crystal's chest.

Like it. Nice form. Odd but could work, given tweaks from experts.

I don't know I think it's good but then the God part kills it.

estomos should be estamos y lo encontro...encontro should be encuentro or encontraste unless you mean he, she or it found it, in which case...encontro'

Line 9 will never happen if you let the candles burn to cake. Blow them out with one breath.

YOU WILL NOT THE LAST WORD Huh? You don't do typos. So, I'm missing something. -9- until I get the point beyond the obvious.

I was going to give it a -10-. But after I noticed EP gave it a nine, I decided that he might have more enzyte, I mean, insight.-9-

Lines that need work: siempre me ama Cuando mi cabeza vola a nuestro futura Y lo encuentro con todo de mí En tus sueños, bailas con migo Como en mis sueños yo bailo con tigo Great effort.-9-

I feel odd being in such august commenting company. Just proves that poetry crosses all lines, especially the line between the sane and the not. By the way, using that word 'latent' on this site is an invitation to latex nights spent in dark fecal caves.

I find this crude and offensive.

Normally I would say "I love it, you're very talented" but since everything that's happened lately, I just want to say I'm sorry, but you're still very talented, and I love you

I think the edit maybe could do with a little editing, still very nice

Very enjoyable

Liked this one................

Stop trying to pretend you know anything about James Joyce.

Is this about tossing off? The last four lines especially make me think so.