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Eros, and Psycho (Villanelle) by horus8 That trick you learned from Cupid
Was something you could not teach
How to be beautifully stupid.
A foul fish with out a fluid,
A rotting, seedless, immature peach
That trick you learned from Cupid.
In between your ears all is vapid
Yes, a good subject for you to preach
How to be beautifully stupid.
Sorry, for being so frank and candid,
but could you show my dog at the beach
That trick you learned from Cupid.
Because your love is pseudo morbid
You only choose to deliver by breech
How to be beautifully stupid.
And you believe that you are splendid
At a mirror you give your speech
That trick you learned from Cupid
How to be beautifully stupid.
Up the ladder:
What Do You Do?
Down the ladder:
paint me a poem with pictures
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.769231
Posted: February 20, 2003 4:44 PM PST; Last modified: February 20, 2003 4:44 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.7573895 Overall Rank: 453 Comments:
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OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3
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20-Feb-03/11:56 PM
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While I still find your comments on other people's poems obnoxious I must admit that I enjoyed this one. I don't understand how someone voted it a zero unless you have really enraged someone that much with your comments. I do find that some of the people here are rather fickle. 7.
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
> OneFingerAnswer
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21-Feb-03/12:29 AM
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Well, i will say that suprises me coming from you, but yes it's a promising vilanelle, and honestly (and i know that you know) i have always been blunt out of a love for what i do. As are you, so regardless of our squabbles i think now would be a good time to say... i love you.
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OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3
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21-Feb-03/12:34 AM
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If only you had told me earlier. You see I just started another relationship and with the way things are going if you decide to wait for me it will be a long while. I'm sorry we missed out on a chance to makesomething wonderful together. Guess we'll have to stick to making just decent poems.
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Shardik @ 24.126.113.154
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21-Feb-03/12:47 AM
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I suppose that will do.
peculiar. i can dig it.
NOTHING WRONG WITH OBNOXIOUSNESS, CULTURED DUDES ARE ALWAYS THAT WAY.
THIS ROCKS, LIKE ALL THAT EROS STUFF AND ITS IMAGINATIVE. I'LL STICK TO STICKMEN FROM NOW ON
Why do you consistantly dwell upon your mother horus? Look at the people you attract to you by doing that. You can't fix Marrianne, let her go Grendal. just bring flowers when she breaks the ground as we all must do. then break wind.
Now thats more like it, at last all I've seen is sex sex sex and frankly I am sick of it. Thank you for this its so pleasing to see one is hungry for knowledge other than pantomime pornography.
Now my dear boy, there is something else please help me. I promised Quarton who has just posted a poem about space, that you may be able to help him with stanza 2, he may think me a darn fool but I loved stanza one but he needs to do something to stanza 2 its simply a beef wellington short of the sage, Please see what you can do I have offered some sound advice to the gentleman but theres a bloody fox trying to get at my chickens, so I must go and sound the pipe horn. Thanks awfully my boy. oh how rude heres a double ..10
Sure, i love his stuff. let me go take a look.
Very enjoyable
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