wow. it was a lot more entertaining than i could have expected, and though i've got a foot phobia, i enjoyed it. as a poem it's well rounded, though the fetish frightens me personally.

i enjoyed the flow of this-it made me feel you had some actual life experience instead of someone pretending they do. those are feelings i have related to at a time in my own past. good show!

short and to the point. it perfectly describes the general mood of the event, though still vague in a "you'd have to know to know" kind of way.

abrupt ending, but point made.

The thong part did it for me, i dont like it.

I there are also other explanations, but I'll accept yours.

Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeegggggggggggg!

They did "it"? I think I get this but, I think it can be done better. Lines one and two are kind of telling, and for my own edification, why grandmums?

I have to give you a compliment. Consistency.

Still, spot on.

The most poignant title ever contrived by a fourteen year old.

Brill!

Wow, a built in brush-off excuse: "Don't tell me you dislike what you read It simply means that you do not understand The beauty of this free verse Is hidden between the words" A new poemranker low!!!

Technically terapin burgers. Funny.

Your meter is nonexistant, the subject is cliché, and you are too young to be even trying.

Good thought, but too cliche. Could use some banter between baby and adult.

the rhyming definitely distracts the reader from whatever this poem is trying to convey. it's free verse, so free it up and let the words out.

I like

I like as well

it made me stop and say "hmm..." the rhyming was done quite nicely as well, and didn't detract from the poem itself.