Great description, only thing I'm not sure about is the line breaks.

really nice a very good poem

Nice, I've been playing around with a poem that has a similar theme to this. =-)

Too etherial for me, but some nice lines.

What is the concept behind this poem? before i make any comment.

Something to ponder for forty days and nights, inspiring.

This is reelly quite good, but you shouldn't have given yourself a 10, otherwise I might have.

Sounds Christian, okay if it is. Cryptic, okay too. High on wine, yep, that's me.

You don't need to sing or sign your name at the bottom, dagga, sir. Your dame has sighed or sung it already. Five, really?

"looked down on his throne" is thrown from the middle ages and a great line. "Surely they're shared" is not, try they've. Overall, an inspiring thought.

More visual art than poetry, especially when taken in a poetic context, but powerful nonetheless.

Sounds like a comment on a good poem or a good comment on a medochre poem. Do you mean the scales on a garter snake? I can't imagine "nothing left to say" unless you mean death. The bull goes on forever.

When you say "fucking shoes" it implies some angst with the shod, and "no fucking raver" some reason to rave, but since you show none, the poem would be stronger without these. I can't relate poem to title without stretching my karma.

Aye, good cleaning up. Also, I have a problem with "I sat in a cloud." With all of the Western imagery associated with clouds, it's difficult to put yourself in (or on) one and still have the reader believe that you are lonesome and/or depressed. Think of Zeuss, angels, and of course, Mick Jagger!

Easy for most nature lovers to identify with, and your use of repetitions is well-received, at least by me. Looks like a lot of effort and appreciation went into this. Have to knock you for giving your own poem a 10 though (remember, your IP is always logged whether logged in or not). Well done though.

Let's hope there's more to old age than a kindly smile given to friends who's minds are as far gone as yours. Use it or lose it, like having the presence of mind to put your comment to somebody's comment right under their comment. By the way, your poem starts off well enough, I just think the ending could be a lot better.

This is very well-written. I'm always drawn to these poems which seem to expand the reflection of a single moment and tell a story of feelings instead of events. I especially like this because it really made no sense to me until I read into the things that seemed out of place. I feel that the introduction of the characters is a little too strong since the conclusion doesn't really wrap up their stories.

Bravo - well done.

I like everything save the last two lines - change 'em up and suprise me.

cute. I think the first few lines could have more feeling in them, especially given your response to Dovina.