Superb! This poem sparkles in its melodies. I think you've just sugar-coated my dreams because I'll surely be singing this in my sleep. •°•Gregory James•°•

I found most of this rather charming and pleasant and was completely blown away by the sixth, seventh and eight stanzas. I love when I can be pulled into a moment of a poem and remain feeling effected by it even after I've finished reading it. •°•Gregory James•°•

interesting piece...nice flow and dynamite beat

great job...i like this a lot...it's sad but really well written

Borders on cliche tripe, and stunning lyrics. 8

Dovina this is very good. I'm a high school math teacher. jrodays daughter Felicia

This is not a Haiku. bro. before you start posting stuff. read up on the different kinds of poetry. love ya sis.

A wonderful friendship goes a long way no matter how near or far, no matter who you are.

I'm sorry about your dad.. You hold on and be strong for your father will need that kind of strength from his family.

Good heavens. I had no idea the Lord made so many grammatical errors when He spoke. Then again, English is his second language.

Almost -10-

deeply moving and so romantic, very well deserving of a 10

My grandmother, especially, was so handicapped. Her two hands could not keep up with her heart.

Very good. Take another look at a few lines: without mutual opportunity Nor before-ten-years you - commas Nor the stars of your looks - "looks" is too plain. catacomb - catacomb mask

I had trouble separating the three characters. Aparently, your friend is sipping the drink of "her." Maybe he's an alcoholic drinking her booz, or in love with her. He feeds off your emotions, which I don't get. Aparently you are about to commit suicied by drowning. Or have I got it all wrong?

Verse 1 is good and sets a platform for a good lyrical story. Verse 2 only hints, it adds nothing to the story. Verse 3 does not build on Verses 1 and 2, but opens a new direction. Now we have two stories begun.

Is English your first language?

There seems no obvious reason for such short couplets here. The poem would benefit from having more solid chunks. Also 'already tell their tale' and other parts seem far too portentious. That is to say you are making the moth's death more significant than it is.

No, you can not just write down a sum, burble on about love, hate, fear and then make some guff conclusion. Your poem about converse blah blah had potential if it didn't lose its focus and conclude all manner of things. The idea of a maths poem is ok. But this is far too lazy. The last verse is cool.

'What use is a thought that cannot be tasted?' come on surely you know the answer to that.