poemranker ::Goodbye by shadowaura

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Lyric № 63797

Goodbye

by shadowaura

Member since 2003 · Posted 4 Sep 2003 · 3 comments

I can hear your tears hit the ground After they gently roll down your face, And I can hear your heart pound As I shiver in your embrace You whisper your sickness in my ear Your voice almost drowned in your rain You tell me that your death is near Not enough love; too much pain Before you struck me as a warrior One willing to fight the enemy Someone who would not surrender, Someone stronger than I will ever be I choke as you embrace your death And now I can see that you're just like me I fight back tears as you draw your last breath, Goodbye my love, and rest in peace... T.J.L age 14

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 2.20 weighted 4.67 rank 12233 views 174 View voting details →

5 votes so far. Yours would make 6.5 votes so far

3 comments

[n/a] SupremeDreamer 4-Sep-03/7:09 PM Reply
notice how you keep talking about the same things? widen your view, there is more in the universe than tears, you simply need to wipe them away and see.
[n/a] shadowaura › SupremeDreamer 5-Sep-03/4:09 PM Reply
will do.
[10] faithmairee 19-Dec-04/1:11 AM Reply
great job...i like this a lot...it's sad but really well written