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The years write us (Free verse) by kawakurdi
The years write us
The days read us
How strange! Each time we are a different text
Green, immature, spoiled, grown-up, grey, lacking melody
We are erased by rubber and Tippex
We are crossed out with the letter X
Lines on lines are rubbed out
What has been left is deformed
What was original has only a trace
What was a favourite has broken rhymes
We are only a palimpsest of our own times
How strange, love! The years write us
Without permission, without mutual opportunity
The days read us like broken lines
Neither do I recognise myself
Nor before-ten-years you
I recognise neither the moon of your face
Nor the stars of your looks
Neither the melody of the heart
Nor the drum of the road
I look at my portrait, I look at your picture
Is it change, catacomb, or a song of nostalgia?
I hear a remote echo
I call it. It does not recognise and respond.
What a fate to become a stranger to you
What a journey to leave yourself behind?
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6
Weighted score: 5.190725
Overall Rank: 4683
Posted: December 19, 2004 3:33 AM PST; Last modified: December 19, 2004 3:33 AM PST
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without mutual opportunity
Nor before-ten-years you - commas
Nor the stars of your looks - "looks" is too plain.
catacomb - catacomb mask