AN poem of great smithery, you have tamed the words well. But how does Joe know the Pope? is he polish or simply a kabanos lover?

ka-BOOM! i like this one.

Tsk tsk. This is horus8's birthday surprise, is it? A non-musical version of an already almost too exciting, freely available song... (or should I call it "track" as all us underground DJs do?) Anyway I have a sort of problem with people using names in poems. It always seems to me that using a name in a poem is one of the most smug and lame things you can do. Viz my poem 'A leak in reality'. I should have just said 'his'. Like that FUCKING OFFSPRING SONG 'blah blah blah' (that's not what its' called probably) where it's like "17 shannon is pregnant"...wow, you've really said a lot there by saying that she was called "shannon". It makes it more true and real. To be honest I don't think that's what's going on here. Blah blah I suppose to win your admiration and the replacement of any 'grin's in my name with an 'a' all I have to do is say this poem is great I loved it wow damn good but actually I didn't. I mean there's interesting imagery and then there's just bollocks. Banshees have nothing to do with staying up or drinking mountain dew voodoos all week or .

D.a. i'm trying to grill for the love of god, and now you've raised questiongs..why post lyrics to a stupid song available at www.gangbox.com under the mp3 of the similiar name...but for the love of jesu'..i only wanted to explore my thad beaumont syndrome..forgive..forgive..i have your slice right here. my guests think i'm insane for sitting as long as i do..productively feeling you, but i don't mind..a friend of mine once said your left tit is pur wit.....too bad the rest of you is EVIL! but i that's the way i prefer you. don't change for nuthing fucker cuz your damn smug. preferably so!

I fear there is a touch of the tortured soul here, and it festoons with it magnitude to a cresendo of typicallity that can be only just forseen, or should that be overlooked, within the first few lines of the opening stanza. A Nice try but nice trys always come last...It's your future, son...I see drawing boards.

oh no.. not the drawing board. i will not lie to my teacher..i will not lie to my teacher..i will not. if you sense it ..it must be right. yes i'm a shallow homophobic (male hustler) and a mindless over sedater (junky) plus i have been known to make horrible decisions and not take responsibility for my actions, or all of this could be all invented fiction and child like fibbing to instigate thought provoking inuendos..naw..it's just ming gas. excuse me. p.s <to hear horus8 play a wide variety of instruments and compose music go to gangbox.com and visit mp3's there are hookers and larry flynt auctioning them off at the beginning for those of you with quicktime. it really plays better than it reads> sorry for the sell-out-plug, but people should see all sides before a lemming effect roots. i love the "wind is a bastard", and i've read all of your work you've read maybe one of mine, lazy boy), so i guess that means i actually care, and i'm not just making assumptions. you're an excellent writer, we can't please everyone all the time.now can we???

Joe sounds like an idiot

interesting piece...nice flow and dynamite beat