-1 because this is really kind of boring, but it's beautifully said.

I like this. I have no idea what it's about, but I like it.

The sun is just a star.

The vertical alignment only adds confusion. The last four words don't make sense.

What a poet will do to stick to a form!

Having trouble following this. Postulates are not proven, maybe that's the point. I like the first line.

Very clever, and quite sweet. A grace note indeed.

Hey, this is a poem! Your same old theme, but this time with images, illustrating your feelings instead of haranguing us with them. Well done. You need to work on the last line of the penultimate stanza; filling is not the right word. You could change "where" to "that", and it would then be grammatically correct, but that would weaken the repetition. Instead search for a more appropriate verb.

Loved it. Beautiful and wistful. God I'm a sucker for wistful. I think you're channeling "Anonymous" again in this piece, lol, it's got that timeless feel (You know, Anonymous the "small rain" guy) kill "slip sibilant." It's clever & reflexive -- which is completely out of place in the mood of the piece. Perhaps I agree the last fractious line oughtn't be so altered. I'm not sure. Suppose you could say something like "with the feeling your home, girl,...". But you've certainly earned the right to mess with forms however you like...

I liked the apples line very much. It's like one of those delightful, bursting with child-like joy unexepected lines eec was so good at surprising you with.

Simple and understated. Can work well a lot of the time.

okay, I'll buy that.

I could critique this, but I wouldn't say anything that Goad hasn't already said. Better than your usual.

I'm guessing you used the so called "big words" because of the title and that they are there to drive the point home. Assuming this, I'll give you a 7. Some of the rhymes do seem very forced though.

I don't think this is really ten-worthy, but I'm going to give you one just because it looks like you were hit with some retaliatory zeros for something.

I like this. Sad and lovely, in my eyes anyway.

Well, I'm still not gittin' past the first line. Punctuation and capitalization more user-friendly might help, what with line 2 not really bein' a sentence an' all. An' ah never seen a brainwave collapse on no film. Guess I'm kina simple that way.

Illustrated passion spreads like new disease A nice ring to that, and as a whole it's working.

Title is much better than before. -8-

Well said