Re: Drinking before noon with Bukowski by Beyond_Dreams	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	17-Mar-05/7:40 PM
I thought this was good, right up until the last few lines.
Re: "America The Beautiful" by jroday	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	18-Mar-05/2:28 AM
Fuck off please. Thank you.
Re: "America The Beautiful" by jroday	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	18-Mar-05/7:20 AM
I wanted to read your "what have you" but, as an American, I couldn't be arsed.
Re: Camping, Volume 3 by jessicazee	Dovina 12.72.33.79	18-Mar-05/1:53 PM
I've liked your camping missives. I have memories like them. How about "unknowing trees" and "blackberry briars whisper sharp stings before sweet fruit" and "ember light"
Re: To Show is Three by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.33.79	18-Mar-05/1:57 PM
The answer to your opening question seems to be "Happiness is confined and it is lonely," but the words are tangled and it's hard to tell.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.33.79	18-Mar-05/2:00 PM
Makes no sense. Of course a reflection is not worthy of love, as the person reflected is. So what.
Re: nightmare by rainybaby	Dovina 12.72.33.79	18-Mar-05/2:05 PM
Have you joined the Your Club in oposition to the rest of us who say "you're"?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.33.79	18-Mar-05/2:12 PM
Too plain and easy it seems. Not enough getting into her as a fat woman. That's the unique part of this - that she's fat, and you glossed over it.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 216.135.39.196	18-Mar-05/2:18 PM
It is what the fuck it is.Ha!
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 216.135.39.196	18-Mar-05/2:49 PM
I meant Ha as in it was just a little sophmoric timekiller that you took way to serious.Just chill out lady were not all so dead serious as you are.I love the critisizm and it seems you are the one full of negativity around here.I believe all your little fans or whatever you want to call them have gone to your head.Like I said just chill everything will be alright! Anthony Q.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	18-Mar-05/4:23 PM
her twat lips like steaks covered in dew LOL. Right on. Pay no attention to the resident dim known as Dovina. She never makes any sense. It seems to me you have addressed her girth in every line. funny shit.
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	18-Mar-05/5:51 PM
A clearly-written, well-structured, and emotive poem. Very well done! You are quite justified in posting it as one poem: it is, after all, an integrated whole. The reverse chronology also adds psychological and emotional tension. Still, the poem has difficulties. When the waitress and the owner are interacting, the waitress's presence seems unnecessary, for it's the owner who fetches the zinfandel: "Our friend disappeared into the darkness, rummaging..." Is the owner testing her knowledge of what he likes to drink?
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	18-Mar-05/6:16 PM
On second thought, keep "items." Its impersonality is appropriate for the following line.
regarding some deleted poem...	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:42 PM
You get a point for 'to see a special croaker/and then I got high/and tried to choke her.' Just for the humour.
Re: the search by i_am_the_popsicle	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:44 PM
'Is the Tao is the way'... How redundant.
Re: Im gonna draw a picture w/ a twist by ShelliAnne	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:46 PM
I feel I must inform you that isn't much of a twist. Lots of people have done it, dear.
Re: My daddy taught me about being a good sport by horus8	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:47 PM
Ah, horus. I love the 'learning disability called nepotism' but the rest, I find, falls short of your usual standard. Ah well.
regarding some deleted poem...	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:50 PM
For 'pulchritudinous' and admitting you looked it up.
Re: the lips of your mouth by silvertongueddevil	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:51 PM
Why the 'eyes of fishes', which are rather boring, as opposed to their scales, which can be quite rainbow-like? And if you're adoring someone, isn't requesting them to lift their lips a bit ungallant -- even if they're shorter, they're supposed to be on a pedestal...
Re: Ga-go, Part two of that same play, the suspensefull climax. by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Tintagiles 198.164.251.10	18-Mar-05/6:56 PM
A little cheesy, but not showing Ferdinand's reaction at the end is a good touch.