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Camping, Volume 3 (Free verse) by jessicazee
Death should be quick, a campfired moth, disappearing wings, a notable noise. Ash light, flying then dying toward the canopy of knowing trees. Above furtive flames, the space holes of meteor showers live in deep dark. The stars drip all night long, blackberry bushes whisper secret nicknames, brambles before fruit.

Up the ladder: Rancor
Down the ladder: October

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.4
Weighted score: 5.286087
Overall Rank: 3732
Posted: March 18, 2005 12:11 AM PST; Last modified: March 18, 2005 12:11 AM PST
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[8] Dovina @ 12.72.33.79 | 18-Mar-05/1:53 PM | Reply
I've liked your camping missives. I have memories like them. How about "unknowing trees" and "blackberry briars whisper sharp stings before sweet fruit" and "ember light"
[n/a] jessicazee @ 64.12.116.195 > Dovina | 23-Mar-05/12:10 AM | Reply
Good ideas. I'll try them.
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.19.192 | 18-Mar-05/10:05 PM | Reply
This is really very good.
[n/a] jessicazee @ 64.12.116.195 > zodiac | 23-Mar-05/12:12 AM | Reply
zodiac- thanks. I've admired your work here, so your compliment means lots. *warm feeling though cold, slipperless feet*
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