| Re: Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco |
elderking 4.246.120.57 |
4-Jul-05/1:28 PM |
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It makes my heart hurt and that's a good thing.
very good.
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| Re: grampa told us stories by elderking |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:12 AM |
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The word "feigning" sets a stage for sattire or belittlement. But I don't think that's what you intend.
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| Re: Promise Me by Taco |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:15 AM |
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You're right, it's not smart to love in this way. Unless this is poking fun at people who do, and I don't see hints of that, it is shallow.
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| Re: pop by Dental Panic |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197 |
5-Jul-05/8:15 AM |
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Three types of pop? Pop as in pop culture, as in father, and as a measure of a moment quickly passed? I stll am not getting much O'Hara. Maybe it's me.
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| Re: The taste of something new. by darby pyn |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:18 AM |
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"as transparent as vanity" is a good line because it can mean at least two things. I wish you had gone the other way with it.
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| Re: pop by Dental Panic |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:20 AM |
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I really don't care what is pop and what is not, but I like the way you've made an issue of it.
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| Re: The And women by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197 |
5-Jul-05/8:23 AM |
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Typo corrected. Stanzas 4,5,7 have been altered.
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| Re: Mother Earth by TLRufener |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:23 AM |
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I don't see any point to this beyond a description.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:25 AM |
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Too much repetition, not enough said.
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| Re: Born and Fed by Dovina |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197 |
5-Jul-05/8:32 AM |
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D? No offense dear, I think you're trying too hard on this one, and the last. Set aside the cow thing for a while and go read G/Ws stuff. Here's the in door: Cyclical ketchup monstrosity.
P.S. I see cows a lot in my travels but aint put pen to paper yet. glad you did.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:32 AM |
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Death always wins, and so may be thought of as joyful in a sadistic way. But to give "it" personality or being seems unrealistic and without impact.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/8:35 AM |
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Beyond the rhymes, I see little here.
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| Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit |
Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99 |
5-Jul-05/8:49 AM |
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I love how you left the misspelling in to illustrate the lack of education in Africa. That's great.
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| Re: A Plea To The Mother(Mother Earth) by Rainbow_chaser |
TLRufener 66.188.122.190 |
5-Jul-05/9:34 AM |
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This absolutely beautiful.
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| Re: The Bastardization of Hypocrisy by Bluemonkey |
Nuit 86.128.208.45 |
5-Jul-05/1:27 PM |
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I cant see the relevance of the title to the verse.
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| Re: The And women by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/1:34 PM |
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I'm not getting what the last 4 lines have to do with it.
We always bless the annuals that send the gardeners transplanting.
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| Re: The Bastardization of Hypocrisy by Bluemonkey |
Dovina 69.235.21.28 |
5-Jul-05/1:36 PM |
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Wasn't hypocracy always a bastard kind of thing?
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| Re: The Bastardization of Hypocrisy by Bluemonkey |
Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.25.173 |
5-Jul-05/1:48 PM |
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Every time I read some Kierkegaard, or go farther back to Augustine or Origen I realize we've been devolving for thousands of years...
what's sad about your poem is that I have the radio on, the t.v. on and I'm posting this on the internet. I'm a flippin' trainwreck!!
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| Re: Because to Live I Must by TLRufener |
Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.25.173 |
5-Jul-05/1:53 PM |
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points for the laugh. what the witch in your poem is really saying is that she/he doesn't really believe in the old ways...or else the curtain would already be pulled away (such is the case with true believers).
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| Re: grampa told us stories by elderking |
Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.25.173 |
5-Jul-05/1:57 PM |
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