It makes my heart hurt and that's a good thing. very good.

The word "feigning" sets a stage for sattire or belittlement. But I don't think that's what you intend.

You're right, it's not smart to love in this way. Unless this is poking fun at people who do, and I don't see hints of that, it is shallow.

Three types of pop? Pop as in pop culture, as in father, and as a measure of a moment quickly passed? I stll am not getting much O'Hara. Maybe it's me.

"as transparent as vanity" is a good line because it can mean at least two things. I wish you had gone the other way with it.

I really don't care what is pop and what is not, but I like the way you've made an issue of it.

Typo corrected. Stanzas 4,5,7 have been altered.

I don't see any point to this beyond a description.

Too much repetition, not enough said.

D? No offense dear, I think you're trying too hard on this one, and the last. Set aside the cow thing for a while and go read G/Ws stuff. Here's the in door: Cyclical ketchup monstrosity. P.S. I see cows a lot in my travels but aint put pen to paper yet. glad you did.

Death always wins, and so may be thought of as joyful in a sadistic way. But to give "it" personality or being seems unrealistic and without impact.

Beyond the rhymes, I see little here.

I love how you left the misspelling in to illustrate the lack of education in Africa. That's great.

I'm not getting what the last 4 lines have to do with it. We always bless the annuals that send the gardeners transplanting.

Wasn't hypocracy always a bastard kind of thing?

Every time I read some Kierkegaard, or go farther back to Augustine or Origen I realize we've been devolving for thousands of years... what's sad about your poem is that I have the radio on, the t.v. on and I'm posting this on the internet. I'm a flippin' trainwreck!!

points for the laugh. what the witch in your poem is really saying is that she/he doesn't really believe in the old ways...or else the curtain would already be pulled away (such is the case with true believers).

I enjoyed.

This absolutely beautiful.

I cant see the relevance of the title to the verse.