Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick	zodiac 212.118.19.140	29-Jul-05/4:43 AM
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=16392
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.19.140	29-Jul-05/4:48 AM
The Arabic word for "wig" comes from the root "blessed". Interesting, huh?
regarding some deleted poem...	drnick 24.247.124.75	29-Jul-05/10:29 AM
If this truely is a lyric to a song, please stop making lyrics that are so specific and boring. This reminds me of some Dave Matthews/John Mayer/Jack Johnson/new-age "punk" crap that makes me want to vomit. I'm not saying you shouldnt write about this very subject, but try and paint a picture rather than draw a diagram...if you can follow that.
Re: Death On Arrival by Miggy	drnick 24.247.124.75	29-Jul-05/10:33 AM
Pretty good, but nothing special. I like the chorus.
Re: Left by Miggy	drnick 24.247.124.75	29-Jul-05/10:45 AM
Boooooooooooooooooooriiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing, if you haven't noticed...the whole love-theme you've got going on here may be popular but it sucks. The lyrics are way too specific. This is the type of song girls in High School sing a long to. Try taking some drugs and write about that.
Re: Brighter by Miggy	drnick 24.247.124.75	29-Jul-05/10:49 AM
Boring, boring, boring. Too specific/personal and waaaaay too played-out a theme. Do you write songs for John Mayer? Take some drugs.
Re: I want to slit my wrist and call it poetry by thepinkbunnyofdoom	drnick 24.247.124.75	29-Jul-05/10:58 AM
I must say I enjoyed this read. I gave you an 8, because nobody else had.
regarding some deleted poem...	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.75	29-Jul-05/10:39 PM
I like the juxtaposition of profanity/violence and vulnerability here. I always thought carrion was plural, like meat.
Re: a love not meant to be by nentwined	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.75	29-Jul-05/10:45 PM
nice job- you really captured the simultaneous hope and awareness of flaws that we bring to relationships
Re: End of Me by sonawrote	sonawrote 64.12.116.197	30-Jul-05/11:30 AM
الآراء العدي٠ة القي٠ة وفيرة تحت السّ٠وات, I need no arabic lessons.....Sona comes from Arabic for Gold!
Re: Weariness by Niphredil	Dovina 62.212.120.118	30-Jul-05/10:20 PM
Like sleeping beneath a volcano.
Re: Revisiting Old Wounds by ObiWonKn	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.139	31-Jul-05/6:23 AM
Are you at the church, near a concert you missed, or couldn't get to?...some public event you are sad you couldn't be a part of? Is this about the Hunchback of Notre Dame, when he missed the OzzieFest? This would actually be pretty good, if you told us that specifically. The beginning is great, sets the scene, paints the picture...and then we say, "Huh?" with a puzzled look on our faces.I would have given this a higher score, had you cleared up the ending.
Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/6:29 AM
I went to see what the links were, that Zodic posted..and yep! the 1st, 3rd, and 4th were right up there! Sorry drnick, it wasn't the worst poem ever written, but it comes close! (So, how do I vote? A high score would imply this is good? Or would imply it is the worst?) I think I will rank it for the worst...that is what my score will reflect!)
Re: A rhyme with no place to go. by darby pyn	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/6:35 AM
'malignant palms squeeze saturation hieroglyphic masturbation.' This line about graffiti is awesome! This is a strange poem, with layers that warrant repeated reads. I read it several times, and it grew on me more each time. Good job. Actually, it would make great lyrics I think!
Re: Thoughts by drnick	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/6:39 AM
hmm..cathy little thing...yeah, I like it well enough. Doesn't Intellectual have two l's?
Re: Then what is the sleeve? by T. Jonathron Remp	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/6:47 AM
Sorry...this thought was Far too free for me...so disconnected...too disconnected to make sense out of. My favorite line was> "The flesh-covered oven hovered as I sat And watched as they pried the g from the front of the gnat" Although I wouldn't have used AS two times, and perhaps would have shortened the line with a word change here or there.
Re: Weariness by Niphredil	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/6:55 AM
I would change blanketing to blankets, and take out the comma after sky. Actually, I would take out all the punctuation, take out "and' and use "the flashes of light".
Re: BY ALL YOUR HEART by prettyktm	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/7:03 AM
too keep> to keep Coz> 'cause Do you love me like I do> implies, Do you love me like I love me? By all your heart> ? with all your heart? ( and, sweetie, he WILL say and promise anything and everything to get 'all of you', and in all probability he will not stand by your side forever; in fact, he may never speak to you again.)
Re: Child Shaped Adult by http://mulberryfairy	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/7:07 AM
I liked this one! Th ending was kind of unexpected and abrupt, though.
Re: Amputation by Enkidu	LilMsLadyPoet 205.188.116.69	31-Jul-05/7:09 AM
Giggled at this one!