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Dovina 212.74.167.76 |
27-Jul-05/6:20 AM |
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I have difficulty making the connection between the events in the poem and the last verse where it`s related to belief in God.
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Dovina 212.74.167.76 |
27-Jul-05/6:25 AM |
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Tiny bubbles in the wine, a song and a feeling. Not bad.
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| Re: Internet Junkie by cuddlytiger17 |
Dovina 212.74.167.76 |
27-Jul-05/6:26 AM |
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Please, don`t devalue my life!
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Dovina 212.74.167.76 |
27-Jul-05/6:32 AM |
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The last verse begins tenderly and redemptively, but I wish you`d not use `rage of jealousy.` The better ending would resolve the issue, as I think it can be resolved.
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| Re: Worth by Dovina |
zodiac 212.38.134.51 |
28-Jul-05/12:11 AM |
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What's with the commas for apostrophes?
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| Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT |
jessicazee 64.12.116.135 |
28-Jul-05/1:41 AM |
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You totally should have stayed up. Don't capitalize "cicadas." Also, I love this. 9.8
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| Re: a love not meant to be by nentwined |
Dovina 212.74.167.76 |
28-Jul-05/7:02 AM |
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Why must such a love be not meant? Or not workable? "combed together" seems odd for liquid and concrete.
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| Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick |
Dan garcia-Black 69.237.239.153 |
28-Jul-05/7:11 PM |
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If the poem had ended at the word orgasm it would be a ten. The :) and comment suck the joyous insanity out of this poem.-6- for getting it half right.
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| Re: What?! by drnick |
Dan garcia-Black 69.237.239.153 |
28-Jul-05/7:13 PM |
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| Re: Suicide by jessicazee |
Dan garcia-Black 69.237.239.153 |
28-Jul-05/7:17 PM |
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Girl, you got poem bearing lips.
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| Re: a love not meant to be by nentwined |
Dan garcia-Black 69.237.239.153 |
28-Jul-05/7:22 PM |
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We all have a crack in our base but we keep on trying. As another poet on this site said earlier, "Why have the choice if we never choose?" Keep sticking your hand into the clay, Netwined. You'll get there someday.
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| Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT |
Dan garcia-Black 69.237.239.153 |
28-Jul-05/7:24 PM |
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Was this at a garden after dinner? I was busy getting twenty pieces of silver from my NEW powerful friends at the time.
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drnick 24.247.124.75 |
28-Jul-05/10:18 PM |
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God damnit, that's good humor.
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drnick 24.247.124.75 |
28-Jul-05/10:23 PM |
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I went to Indio, Ca. and camped out, so perhaps the imagery was too easy/wonderful for me...but I dont care. This was bad ass!
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zodiac 212.118.19.140 |
29-Jul-05/4:01 AM |
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I wondered why none of the people you thought about were Arabs. Then I read your reply to Dovina below. Good job. We SHOULD feel bad about everybody except them.
Love from Arabia,
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| Re: End of Me by sonawrote |
zodiac 212.118.19.140 |
29-Jul-05/4:15 AM |
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Arabic is the most etymologically simple language I've ever heard of. For example, the Arabic slang word for "shit" is a combination of the roots "end" and "ball". The Qurannic word for "shit" is a combination of "to put onesself outside" and "oil".
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| Re: My Mornings were Filled with Nightmares and Pies by T. Jonathron Remp |
zodiac 212.118.19.140 |
29-Jul-05/4:18 AM |
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"Sweet smelling clouds Darken my skies" is the best description of the men's tent at an Arab wedding I've ever read.
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| Re: Internet Junkie by cuddlytiger17 |
zodiac 212.118.19.140 |
29-Jul-05/4:22 AM |
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Hey, you're right. It IS so much better than reality.
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| Re: Polar Bearings by impert&ent |
zodiac 212.118.19.140 |
29-Jul-05/4:30 AM |
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Seriously, that's kind of clever. Because the only way you couldn't draw a line around the earth to pass between two objects is if one was on top of the other.
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| Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick |
zodiac 212.118.19.140 |
29-Jul-05/4:43 AM |
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