| Re: Hindsight by darby pyn |
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26-Jul-05/6:34 AM |
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" I was their chocolate." Ace. I'm guessing most (95%) of all children are unplanned and then resented by their parents. There's potential here but it's gonna take work.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.139 |
26-Jul-05/6:38 AM |
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I'm assuming lyra is your cat.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.139 |
26-Jul-05/6:50 AM |
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it seems romantic then goes all sexual but -rim shot- is a ?drum hit? here. i think.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.139 |
26-Jul-05/6:54 AM |
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Maybe too much time on the jeans. Just a little trim. No pun intended.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.139 |
26-Jul-05/6:57 AM |
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This suggests to me you are talking about a poetess at a reading you saw.
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Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.152.205 |
26-Jul-05/11:16 AM |
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LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:00 PM |
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What a weird little bit of whimsy! The reference to beery bladder kinda grossed me out...uhm...this is the strangest thing I have read in a long time...hmmmm....I like the line "and revel buoyant", and the last stanza...cool rythm to it.
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LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:02 PM |
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What?! I am speechless...how could you two give this an 8 and a 10?! What in the heck am I not seeing here?!...never mind...I totally disagree, for the record!
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LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:09 PM |
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Ugh...I have a feeling you had something you really wanted to say with this...but it got lost in there somewhere...everywhere. An evolution genius> An evolutionary genius. I LIKE the thought that if a man fucks another he succeeds in only raping his own ego. It is a worthwhile thing to talk about...the middle stanza is all over the place...and the whole thing is unclear, throughout.
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| Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:14 PM |
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man! This actually got my attention, as I kept on reading, and then you dropped the ball! CHOP! END> Nothing...it fell on its face! finish the thought here...you were rambling on with a story, that must have been leading somewhere...finish it!
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| Re: Internet Junkie by cuddlytiger17 |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:16 PM |
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| Re: Polar Bearings by impert&ent |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:22 PM |
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YESss! Woo-Hoo!!!!! Two thumbs up!
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| Re: Worth by Dovina |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:27 PM |
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hmmm....cool...though you lost me on stanza 3.
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| Re: Noble oboe now sings every next saturday evening by ALChemy |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:32 PM |
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I thought the use of 'upon the Moonbeam Starship Satellite" a little long-winded..and ? unclear...otherwise I like it. I was thinking...> upon the moonbeamed__________ (something).
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| Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:35 PM |
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Here, Here! What fun! Thanks for sharing!
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| Re: A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:44 PM |
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Dearest pinkbunnyofDOOM...just an observation...you start out saying you don't care...but the fact that you responded, and at length, contradicts that assertion. (Along with the fact that you find it disturbing, albiet, at the slightest.) I don't know the politics going on behind this post...and don't care to. I would share, however, that I find a strange sense of disturbing satisfaction at the thought that this site is set up to observe behaviour and writing, and perhaps writers...and if I were the observer, I would be quite amused....oh, wait, I AM an observer...and I am...(quite amused.)
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| Re: Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:48 PM |
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LMAO...wow...what fun non-sense...can't give it a high score, though it was good for a chuckle. You have a strange sense of humor...one I see in more than a few unique friends of mine.
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| Re: Hindsight by darby pyn |
LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.67 |
26-Jul-05/10:57 PM |
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Man...I am putting this on my fav list...what a wretchedly real piece...I smelled it, tasted it, saw it from my hiding place in the corner, watching it unfold...vile stuff and real stuff...and I rose with you when you came out the other side! Awesome, awesome job!
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INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197 |
27-Jul-05/6:08 AM |
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funny thing. your homepage says nothing about helping those in need. not your job eh?
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| Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 212.74.167.76 |
27-Jul-05/6:14 AM |
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God never made a sound, but you tell us not to underestimate God. The white veins were not God, nor were the fireflies? The laughing frogs and anguishing cicadas have it right. What are you, the observer, anguishing with, if not the sounds of God? Say what you mean, man! Or as CS Lewis said, the skill of writing is to know exactly what you want to say, and to say exactly that.
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