I enjoyed this very much. 8

A little punctuation problem but it sounds good. I'm not sure you need "of a coin" in verse 3. You did a good job of avoiding sounding like a tree hugger.

aside from the -an, I'd say perfect.

Monster.

You should have made it a poem, it would have been excellent!

Death is not there until it happens. This poem is about dying presumably from a high fall. I believe there is a difference. Had you written about the noises the body makes while decomposing (Gases trumpeting out our orifices or maggots tap dancing on our bones )I might have said yes death does sing. But not everyone dies with a splat so you don't always get your song. I saw "sutured woodwind" as the jaw of a corpse sewn together expelling gas with a toot. The words sound good but the poem as a whole disappoints me.

As previously stated "rotates a swirl" is redundant and in addition "Green gleaming blue flash" is just plain ridiculous. Put a comma in there or be annihilated by the paradox you have created in this Haiku.

I see from this poem that you are still a terribly wounded ditch pig.

A terrible ripple of bottom fat on an otherwise blemish-free nappy.

If gayness could be reduced to its raw intrinsic matter and then condensed into some form of compound it would be a potion on which you would daily have gorged until your bottom was as dilated as a blue whales snatch.

Richard Whiteley once told me to fuck off. I think he meant the message to be passed on to you from beyond the grave.

It all began with Jon Jonsson, who came from Wisconsin, and worked in a graveyard there. Whether late at night or in broad daylight, he asked himself this thing: where did it start and where will it end and how will we know which is which? Day after day and year after year he asked, until one day he passed. In his pocket they found a note that said 'put this on my stone: It all began with Jon Jonsson'.

And it's look, rude, unbending, lusty, made me think of myself,.... but not quite.

alllright ALRIGHT!

Don't you think the Romans probably knew what the word meant? And the Middle English? And, personally, I did. -7-

You are childish. This proves it.

"Sucky,sucky. Five dolla. Me so horny. Me love you long time." You gotta love Kubrick.

What is hilarious is how you think his actions have to do with YOU. You are not very good at poetry no matter what you think. I've never liked anything you've written. But what does it matter? you wouldn't like my poetry either. this too, is a bad poem.

7 for the comedy value, and the adverse spiritual affects. You poor soul...!

And out of this egg would come lifegoo suspending quite an enormous young megaturtle