Re: Decoys and Disguises behind large-areas of smoke screens by Beyond_Dreams	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	24-Jul-05/8:46 AM
"Sucky,sucky. Five dolla. Me so horny. Me love you long time." You gotta love Kubrick.
Re: A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	T. Jonathron Remp 69.151.11.174	24-Jul-05/9:12 AM
You should have made it a poem, it would have been excellent!
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	24-Jul-05/9:58 AM
Death is not there until it happens. This poem is about dying presumably from a high fall. I believe there is a difference. Had you written about the noises the body makes while decomposing (Gases trumpeting out our orifices or maggots tap dancing on our bones )I might have said yes death does sing. But not everyone dies with a splat so you don't always get your song. I saw "sutured woodwind" as the jaw of a corpse sewn together expelling gas with a toot. The words sound good but the poem as a whole disappoints me.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	24-Jul-05/10:17 AM
As previously stated "rotates a swirl" is redundant and in addition "Green gleaming blue flash" is just plain ridiculous. Put a comma in there or be annihilated by the paradox you have created in this Haiku.
Re: A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.133.245.248	24-Jul-05/12:58 PM
What is hilarious is how you think his actions have to do with YOU. You are not very good at poetry no matter what you think. I've never liked anything you've written. But what does it matter? you wouldn't like my poetry either. this too, is a bad poem.
Re: Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp	Nuit 86.128.92.138	25-Jul-05/3:09 AM
7 for the comedy value, and the adverse spiritual affects. You poor soul...!
Re: Worth by Dovina	Stephen Robins 84.13.133.201	25-Jul-05/11:26 AM
I see from this poem that you are still a terribly wounded ditch pig.
Re: My Golden Birthday by jessicazee	Stephen Robins 84.13.133.201	25-Jul-05/11:28 AM
A terrible ripple of bottom fat on an otherwise blemish-free nappy.
Re: Stabbed with a Carrot by T. Jonathron Remp	Stephen Robins 84.13.133.201	25-Jul-05/11:31 AM
If gayness could be reduced to its raw intrinsic matter and then condensed into some form of compound it would be a potion on which you would daily have gorged until your bottom was as dilated as a blue whales snatch.
Re: THE HANDS OF THE CLOCK by prettyktm	Stephen Robins 84.13.133.201	25-Jul-05/11:32 AM
Richard Whiteley once told me to fuck off. I think he meant the message to be passed on to you from beyond the grave.
Re: Polar Bearings by impert&ent	T. Jonathron Remp 69.152.93.158	25-Jul-05/12:54 PM
And out of this egg would come lifegoo suspending quite an enormous young megaturtle
Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp	impert&ent 80.195.201.212	25-Jul-05/2:16 PM
It all began with Jon Jonsson, who came from Wisconsin, and worked in a graveyard there. Whether late at night or in broad daylight, he asked himself this thing: where did it start and where will it end and how will we know which is which? Day after day and year after year he asked, until one day he passed. In his pocket they found a note that said 'put this on my stone: It all began with Jon Jonsson'.
Re: Worth by Dovina	darby pyn 207.200.116.130	25-Jul-05/3:59 PM
I enjoyed this very much. 8
Re: Worth by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197	25-Jul-05/4:33 PM
And it's look, rude, unbending, lusty, made me think of myself,.... but not quite.
Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.197	25-Jul-05/9:05 PM
alllright ALRIGHT!
Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp	zodiac 212.118.19.130	26-Jul-05/1:00 AM
Don't you think the Romans probably knew what the word meant? And the Middle English? And, personally, I did. -7-
Re: A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	zodiac 212.118.19.130	26-Jul-05/1:04 AM
You are childish. This proves it.
Re: Worth by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	26-Jul-05/1:48 AM
A little punctuation problem but it sounds good. I'm not sure you need "of a coin" in verse 3. You did a good job of avoiding sounding like a tree hugger.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.139	26-Jul-05/6:25 AM
aside from the -an, I'd say perfect.
Re: Jennifer won the war. by darby pyn	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.139	26-Jul-05/6:29 AM
Monster.