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Weariness (Free verse) by Niphredil
weariness, blanketing the world with a dull shroud; and flashes of light piercing the clear night sky, seem faint and weak and very, very far away.

Up the ladder: Crisscrossing My Mind
Down the ladder: Break

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10566
Posted: July 30, 2005 3:26 AM PDT; Last modified: July 30, 2005 3:26 AM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 62.212.120.118 | 30-Jul-05/10:20 PM | Reply
Like sleeping beneath a volcano.
[3] LilMsLadyPoet @ 205.188.116.69 | 31-Jul-05/6:55 AM | Reply
I would change blanketing to blankets, and take out the comma after sky. Actually, I would take out all the punctuation, take out "and' and use "the flashes of light".
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