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Weariness

by Niphredil

Member since 2005 · Posted 30 Jul 2005 · 2 comments

weariness, blanketing the world with a dull shroud; and flashes of light piercing the clear night sky, seem faint and weak and very, very far away.

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[8] Dovina 30-Jul-05/10:20 PM Reply
Like sleeping beneath a volcano.
[3] LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jul-05/6:55 AM Reply
I would change blanketing to blankets, and take out the comma after sky. Actually, I would take out all the punctuation, take out "and' and use "the flashes of light".