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Weariness (Free verse) by Niphredil

weariness, blanketing the world with a dull shroud; and flashes of light piercing the clear night sky, seem faint and weak and very, very far away.

LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jul-05/6:55 AM
I would change blanketing to blankets, and take out the comma after sky. Actually, I would take out all the punctuation, take out "and' and use "the flashes of light".




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