Re: A Night at the Move-ies by Crann Mascher	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:02 AM
I love your poetry...your my hero...LOL Bethy :)
Re: Tangled web. by darby pyn	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:03 AM
I had to read this poem a couple of times...but I like it...Bethy
Re: Not in The Classroom by Gbaddy Faggy	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:06 AM
I love the word...unperturbed...Bethy :)
Re: You can never go back! by pennymarie	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:09 AM
Think before you speak, right...or just think it really loud in your head !!! Bravo,good one! Bethy :)
Re: In My Words by RGSsparky	Bethy 24.222.32.251	5-Aug-05/7:11 AM
YEAH! Bethy:)
Re: Never born. by | Broken |	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/7:17 AM
Thanks Bethy .. (",*)
Re: War by zodiac	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	5-Aug-05/7:20 AM
Upon the first reading, it kinda reminded me of the first part of the animated british film "When the Wind Blows" An older couple with a humdrum life and then the omen of war and certain death. I didn't pick up on much of the symbolism. Maybe if you used "The" Yeast it might be deciphered as "The East" which might then lead to the idea that Girlie is from the west. I don't think anyone will recognize Bush as Girlie but they might see the U.S. as Girlie. "Peaces" slips buy as "Peices" on first read. So the last verse kind of comes out of left field after all that domestic talk. So Maybe some slightly less abrasive words than "pungent, graves and bombed". Maybe "as fertile and pungent as mud-pies, as a scorched earth. And yet we have no bread."? I'd prefer Peace over "peaces" only because it's a plural pitted up against a singular. Or maybe just place a period after peaces. The broken sentences make a cryptic poem even more cryptic. Your choice of symbolism and how you set the mood is great there just needs to be some more clues.
Re: A Night at the Move-ies by Crann Mascher	T. Jonathron Remp 70.243.140.198	5-Aug-05/7:38 AM
This poem is of great importance, and impotence
Re: The Stone Man by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:18 AM
I love this. It's just right. You managed to capture the right emotions in it .. if you get what I mean.
Re: Vain Moment by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:19 AM
Hahaha ... This is fun!! (",*) Cheers for Picaso !
Re: Pilfered Pancakes, Broken Trust by Crann Mascher	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	5-Aug-05/8:20 AM
There is only one thing that comes to mind when I read this poem: That I cannot think of the thing that comes to mind when I read this poem. Therefore, I must give this poem a 10 by the Squeeze Theorem: 10 < Pilfered Pancakes, Broken Trust < The number of fingers crammed up my donkey (10)
Re: Secret Dream-Thoughts of a Married Man by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:21 AM
Wow wee ..... (",*)
Re: Disregard the first line of this poem by T. Jonathron Remp	Crann Mascher 207.252.227.7	5-Aug-05/8:23 AM
This one tied me in a mind-knot! Bravissimo!
Re: Ain,t Life Fuckin Great,(part2 The Stone Man) by Bethy	| Broken | 202.156.2.82	5-Aug-05/8:24 AM
Aww .. this is sad ...
Re: Ain,t Life Fuckin Great,(part2 The Stone Man) by Bethy	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	5-Aug-05/8:28 AM
Good show *9*
regarding some deleted poem...	Crann Mascher 207.252.227.7	5-Aug-05/8:28 AM
INCREDIBLE! This is the essence of haiku. Magnifique.
Re: I”d Kill Your Dog For Respect by Crann Mascher	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	5-Aug-05/8:57 AM
Killin your hoez dog for some street respect is off da chizzle, my nizzle. P.S. Hard Thug Z ain't so hard after awhile, soften him up with a little raspberry ganoush for starters.
Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp	Crann Mascher 207.252.227.7	5-Aug-05/9:01 AM
Etymology is fun! I look forward to the sequel.
Re: All are welcomed. by darby pyn	Bethy 24.222.32.211	5-Aug-05/11:44 AM
Holy frig...lol...I had to get me a dictionary for some of them big words...but it works for me...awesome...I think like you write...lol...ooops just had an insane moment...lol Bethy:)
Re: I”d Kill Your Dog For Respect by Crann Mascher	Bethy 24.222.32.211	5-Aug-05/11:51 AM
lost for words here...but... yep I like this poem... Bethy :)