| Re: at home amongst the strangers by unknown^user |
wilco 66.61.101.130 |
2-Sep-05/5:22 PM |
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Good memories. I'm guessing you meant to leave out the capitalizations and normally that would annoy me, but for some reason I think it's okay here.
It's funny how watching this business in New Orleans on TV is almost like a movie. You can't believe it's really happening. Funny thing is that if it were a movie, you'd be sitting there, watching it and thinking, "this shit would never happen in a million years".
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| Re: The fight by INTRANSIT |
wilco 66.61.101.130 |
2-Sep-05/9:01 PM |
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naughty...I'd change huge kitchen to large kitchen for better flow.
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| Re: First Love by Dovina |
zodiac 86.108.10.81 |
3-Sep-05/4:22 AM |
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Um, because seasons and sunrises USUALLY stay? Forgive me if I think the problem's your expectation, not the sunrise.
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| Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey |
zodiac 86.108.10.81 |
3-Sep-05/4:25 AM |
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| Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey |
zodiac 86.108.10.81 |
3-Sep-05/4:25 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7!3 219.95.8.62 |
3-Sep-05/5:33 AM |
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lol thanks, everyone for your comments! really appreciate it.
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| Re: Sugar Coating by nentwined |
7!3 219.95.8.62 |
3-Sep-05/5:44 AM |
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| Re: The Scout by wilco |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67 |
3-Sep-05/6:54 AM |
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-extraneous- good word but it bugs me beat-wise. Something about l-3 and l-4 in the first don't jive.
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| Re: The fight by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 12.96.171.27 |
3-Sep-05/6:55 AM |
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Very naughty! Go straight to your room!
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| Re: The Scout by wilco |
Dovina 12.96.171.27 |
3-Sep-05/7:00 AM |
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"virgin canvas" has no picture, yet a tale unfolds. Also, "scout" as if searching ahead for some group of people - maybe another word. A way it could have gone, and might go.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 12.96.171.27 |
3-Sep-05/7:57 AM |
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"I think you can find a less overused way of saying "there are birds as far as the eye can see" But I see the picture, and isn't that what matters?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67 |
3-Sep-05/8:04 AM |
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| Re: Cinder Mint Disaster Garden by MacFrantic |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67 |
3-Sep-05/8:16 AM |
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I saw mental patients in a garden. I'm not kidding.
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| Re: Dale by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 12.96.171.2 |
3-Sep-05/9:55 AM |
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What's left? Black russians, that's what. Far super over White, in every way. I've never taught a man to play darts and then have him beat his father. Maybe you need another lesson.
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| Re: Cinder Mint Disaster Garden by MacFrantic |
Bethy 24.222.32.225 |
3-Sep-05/12:01 PM |
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Hey, me too...a garden of lonely desperate souls...:) Bethy
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| Re: The fight by INTRANSIT |
Bethy 24.222.32.196 |
3-Sep-05/3:53 PM |
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giggle-gasp-splat!!! I love this line...this poem made me roar with...gasp! laughter...:) Bethy
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 12.96.171.27 |
3-Sep-05/3:57 PM |
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Written as if you're drunk. That's ok, just polish it some later. More poetic and all that.
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| Re: Into My World by sliver |
ay deee 24.255.87.123 |
3-Sep-05/8:45 PM |
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if i were reneee, i would take you to bed right now, but since i am not, i just want to know what exactly it is about renee you like so much, why is she so beautiful?
i like the form a bit
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| Re: orange crumble by impert&ent |
ay deee 24.255.87.123 |
3-Sep-05/10:03 PM |
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i can imagine this wall, i think i pass it often
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| Re: Stranger by MacFrantic |
ay deee 24.255.87.123 |
3-Sep-05/10:33 PM |
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when does he find time to get new fish?
i gave an eight just because that last part didn't flow to me
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