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Sugar Coating (Free verse) by nentwined Sugar coated candy pill,
wrapped with love
and good intentions,
makes
you soft
and sick
and simple --
slap your head and
twist your
dimples.
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:19 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:19 AM PSTWeighted score: 6.7725773 Overall Rank: 441 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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An around-the-corner image. Almost as twisted as the pill itself, I'm sure.
this is just too good... and real...
i don't even know what to say about this one
I really like this one, it makes me all exstatic :)
good.
I like the kick in the face at the end - a real wake-up to the emotionally deluded (like me).
lol, this is the third time I've logged in and the second time I've gotten two of *your* poems to randomly review...
dimples? that's not what came to mind. Either way, a good message.
haha nice..
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