Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.115.207	11-Jun-06/6:03 PM
mouse turds
regarding some deleted poem...	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.115.207	11-Jun-06/6:04 PM
laughably bad. 0/10 is a compliment.
Re: Blessings by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 86.131.60.175	13-Jun-06/1:01 AM
Amanda, I can't stop for long but I thought I'd log in briefly to say that I think this is one of the best poems you've posted so far. It has an almost impeccable rhythm (line 24 I think you can afford to lose 'all', and line 27 felt a little short - other than that I have no complaints) which meant that I even glossed over the 'hearts/apart' rhyme without noticing...very rare indeed for me not to see that one straight away. I have to say also that it has a lightness of heart which is ideal for a sunny tuesday morning here. So thank you for the read! Anyhoo, must dash - I'll catch you later, for sure.
Re: You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	Ranger 86.131.60.175	13-Jun-06/1:03 AM
Person using Mr. Robins' computer: thanks for the anon zero - I assume it's to get Fraser back on top spot (where he rightly belongs) but you know, you could have just asked ;-)
Re: The Runt by Caducus	lmp 141.154.134.3	13-Jun-06/7:04 AM
a harsh topic but very well written . well, that's life, i guess... like the use of color and element: "blue montage of sulphur" and also the "bowl headed woman" (reference to her haircut?). "growling wind of ash" is again a fitting description. i guess you also illustrate a pretty interesting point about parents who want their kids to witness the "miracle of birth" by having a littler of puppies. sure, if everything goes well it can be a great experience (or maybe even still it can be traumatic). but if it doesn't, then how do you explain? especially if the parent has a hard time of it? i am presuming this was written from personal experience?
Re: Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.124.248	13-Jun-06/1:24 PM
I dedicate this to all my fans.
Re: Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	15-Jun-06/11:14 AM
True Story: Probably the second most common version of Eenie, meenie, minie, moe rhyme has this verse in it; Eeny, meeny, miny, moe Catch a nigger by his toe If he hollers make him pay, Fifty dollars every day So someone more vulgar than you beat you to it. PS. By deleting this comment you here-by confirm you're an inexcusable twit.
Re: Blessings by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	15-Jun-06/12:34 PM
Here's the atheist argument against the existence of god: http://www.infidels.org/library/modern/quentin_smith/atheism.html Here's the apologist response: http://www.tektonics.org/guest/kalamber.html Funny how they use the same idea against each other. The "why does evil exist if god is all good and compassionate" argument by atheists is silly because good and evil are just positive and negetive. It's like saying a perfectly positive thing like the number 2 can't exist because negetive numbers exists. If god destroys all evil he becomes unidentifiable as an all good being because everything else becomes perfectly good. He'll have to carry a sign or something when that happens. Evil is a counter balence of good, good is a counter balence of evil. I suppose it's part of our purpose here on earth to figure out exactly which is which.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.68.32	15-Jun-06/4:37 PM
Total garbage. I turd my pants laughing at the yankee soldiers getting the shit beaten out of them. Keep up the good work, Hassan!
Re: Blessings by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 66.235.27.131	15-Jun-06/7:53 PM
It's an uplifting verse for church and friendly settings like greeting cards. As such, the rhythm and rhyme should be consistent, which they mostly are.
Re: Ice by MacFrantic	Dovina 66.235.27.131	16-Jun-06/7:35 AM
I like this and relate to it, but can't say why. "Spending your luck" as is yours is mine to spend - alright, thought provoking. And to remember winter while pondering it in November is long-range thinking. And obstacles as "growing holes in my frozen face" - yep, I get that.
Re: The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	Dovina 66.235.27.131	16-Jun-06/7:39 AM
You've got a great idea here. I'll say what they often say to me. Make it more poetic! Take these thoughts and form the words into pleasing and provocative lines.
Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.6	16-Jun-06/10:28 AM
Crashing down makes one think the ride crashed, in the end...which WOULD have taught all those nasty grinners a lesson...but doubt you meant to imply that there. Good job with this! I DO hate to see someone on a ride they thought they would like, only to become distressed...and to think some get their jollies from watching this unfold...disturbing; and well crafted in this piece.
Re: Murder Phoenix Born (meta-villanelle) by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.6	16-Jun-06/10:40 AM
Oh...Oh my...this has to be one of my favorites. Hauntingly beautiful, and beautifully crafted. Lovely, lovely. All but the line: "Which would scatter like a broken stone" change that and you get my 10...keep it, and get a high 9 :) Have I ever told you I am in lust with your mind, at moments like this?
Re: Herencia Latina by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.6	16-Jun-06/11:04 AM
Viole..I read as violin and violence, and Fire...I wonder which you meant. "Silence shatters, blooming from a dark-staved scroll Curving cries encircle this typhoon"...hmmm... I like the delving this asks of the reader...love all the layers. And..with all the rhyming, it would have been easy for this to have gone to crap...but you rhymed all over the place without it getting away from you...the rythm and placement of rhymes worked very well. Good job!
Re: The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/1:22 PM
Too much repetition of words and phrases in this one. Makes the poem come off as monotonous. Let me show you: The last of the winds came today. A final push. Tomorrow we’ll hear what they’ve left us. It's message never closer. Look to the east, you can almost feel it on your cheek and to the west it holds you like a bed of fallen leaves. Did you feel the cold? It’s always worse than you remember. I would tell you I made it that way but you wouldn’t believe me. Not without all the things I'll never say. The last of the winds came today. They have not yet gone. It lingers like a sleep that’s not ready to surrender. A scent left on your shoulder by a heart so close to yours. The last of the winds takes a little of you with it. Leaves you empty and allows the possibility of fullness.
Re: Being by wHorus8w	Edna Sweetlove 81.178.84.120	18-Jun-06/4:57 AM
I am really surprised you have been awarded a POEMWANKER award as an imposter and plagiarist. I would never have gone as far as that. Pretentious ill-mannered twit, yes, but a plagiarist, oh dear, perish the thought.
Re: A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove	conny lingers 195.93.21.5	18-Jun-06/5:07 AM
yummy
Re: i carry my midget wife by conny lingers	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.25.78	18-Jun-06/5:27 PM
What a lovely poem. I have often fancied sex with a stumpy midget. Would you recommend it, dearest one?
Re: Battle of the sexes by conny lingers	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.25.78	18-Jun-06/5:28 PM
Excellent. I love anal intercourse.