Bollocks

An odd fullstop would do no one any harm, sweetie.

Im sorry, it's just not written well.

Try leading your audience instead of telling them what to think. I hate whining.

Yes, I have been spoken to by such voices. A less cryptic title might dispell criticism.

I had a comment to make, but seeing as the author is a total fuck, I'll keep it to myself. Edna=0 Just because. :)

Yes, a familiar sentiment. Spleen in the title is a correct usage, but an uncommon one; maybe another word. Welcome back.

Another criticism of Christian hypocricy, and fairly well stated. Ironically, one of Jesus' major complaints with the "church" of his day was hypocricy.

We've all seen the three piece suit politician you're talking about. Cigars, briefcases, etc. A poem is much better if you make the point from a DIFFERENT angle. Lead us on a bit, make us work a bit to get to the solution.

It's really scattered - more a collection of half-connected thoughts. I guess maybe that's what you're aiming at; if so they're a bit too independently crisp and sharp to be dreamy thoughts.

I like this very much. Although the form seems to beg to be rid of line three and four, and replaced with 'rolling across deserts'. You are very close. The title sucks. I love numbers, but they are for math.

I relate to scarce memories, ones that feel like they responded to fate. I don't believe in fate, but I know the feeling. I don't like the idea of "correct tastes." The Eiffel tower has an appealing shape, but it may not be a "correct taste" to everyone; if fact it is not.

Fare price, as in a ticket to Heaven, is meant, I presume, as criticism of the church for wanting money for such passage. It's acommon theme, and not too well presented here. I'd rather see a juxteposition of "fare" and "fair."

Cliche anyone? Im not trying to be a jerk, but you need to try to get out of cliche mode. Make your point from a semi-unique angle. If you talk about a specific experience, the obvious points will come though wihtout you having to tell us. Tell us instead about the intricacies of the experience. The name of the poem itself is a cliche.

If you think your religion/church is so blood sucking than why do you still follow it? Or have you recently left a church? I have never practiced religion for these obvious reasons. Spirituality > Religion. Find a unique way to say it instead of staing the obvious.

L4 seems awfully forced. The '-'s are typographically (and syntactically) bum. Put 'then' into the second verse.

A little unsubstantial. It has a well crafted order.

Well written.

Disappointing considering your track record.

Excellent - I've missed your villanelles. Typo line 14 - 'unconscious'. Your refrains are extremely well-worked here and keep a constant flow, which isn't easy in a vil. I also quite like the occasional extra rhyme ('on', 'pawn'). It's almost contradictory though, the bleakness contained within such a beautiful form. It seems to demand a certain eloquence of language which undermines all the boredom represented. 'With the nuisance of a ray' is the best line here.